Son..
You were full term when we lost you
We never got a chance to hug
give you a kiss.. or even hold you
For the Doctor took you and rushed away
I did get a glance.. just as you left
Breathless.. Lifeless.. all tangled and twisted
I looked down and saw you all cold and blue
my life ended right along with you
They tossed you in a cold metal bowl
you're going to see Daddy..in the waiting room
Little did he know how he was to see you
what a darn cruel way.. they presented you
Son we never knew you were being strangled
your cord was wrapped around both arms
and twice around your neck
We wanted to kiss you..hold you..bond with you
tell you how much we loved you
They didn't give us a choice that day
they were in a rush to get you away
They sent you down to the chilly basement
we were told you never took a breath
you never got a birth or death certificate
There is a piece of paper they gave us
It has your name written on it
it reads the word { Baby! }
Well { Baby! }.. We have had a name for you
It's in our hearts your four Sisters know it
your little Brother too
Son we all Love you..wish you could be with us
but God!! had better plans for you.
Author notes
My write is dedicated to my Son ..true event..happened in year of 1982.
I lost my son at 38 weeks pregnant..this was years ago..but just recently did I bring myself to write about it..to this day there is no name on his grave
it simply reads the word baby!!
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Silver trophy winner
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What did you think
Comments
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"I looked down and saw you all cold and blue
my life ended right along with you"
"They sent you down to the chilly basement
we were told you never took a breath
you never got a birth or death certificate"
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what a beautiful way to remember your son, by writing about it...it can takes years and sometimes even then the words don't come...this was heartfelt and deeply moving...thank you for opening your heart and sharing your story...may the light of love fill your heart and heal your soul...peace and light, kendal
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WOw Wow wow that is so sad It touch my heart and gave me the chills. It blew me away I am so sorry for your loss.
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This touched my heart in ways that I just can't put into words...
I'm so very sorry for your loss
I guess (though I KNOW it's not understandable) God had another plan for this little one but know that one day, you will meet your son and get to do all the motherly things with him that you couldn't here on Earth
Thank you for sharing your heart
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thank you for being a click away....again my condolences to you...since he was buried years ago..i never could go see him....also the name i did have for him is now my second sons name...so for years its been baby!!!!but he knows in my heart name or no name...i love him and will always be in my heart and i will see him in heaven.and he knows now that the way society ran then.. that i had.. no choice in the way things happened.take care/hugs/honeydew. -
My darling! My heart just breaks for you! If I were you, I'd have "Baby" take off and replaced with his name. I'm so deeply sorry for what you had to endure.
Things have changed so much since back then. Thank God!!
When we knew Chloe had died. They brought her into the room we were in, all wrapped up in a blanket and held so sweetle and gently in a nurses arms. Her daddy and mommy held her for over an hour, talking to her. My older kids held her too. I just couldn't bring myself to hold her. I just couldn't. So I just kissed her sweet face.
I know it took a lot of courage for you to write this and I applaud you for doing it. If you ever need a friend, I'm right her, just a click away.
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This is a wonderful poem that flows with emotion and tender thoughts. I thank you for sharing your life experience with us in this sad and loving poem.
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What a beautiful poem to your son.
So sad and touching. I had heard my
whole life about the brother who passed
before I was born. A few years ago I
went for his birth certificate and after
a lot of trouble, was able to purchase
a stillbirth certificate, so the part
about that paper really touched me.
good luck in the contest.
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thank you for reading my write...and thank you for your applaud...i wish they would reconize that each baby and or child or birth was a living human being and that th e parents should be able to name them...i feel so bad that i didnt get to name him..as i look around the graveyard and see so many children with a name...my sons stone only reads the word baby!..things may be different today i,m not sure..at least i do know that now the let you hold your child and be able to say goodbye and at least hold cuddle and reconize that this was once a human breatheing individual..i am still very upset the way the treated me that day and most of all the way my child was done.thank you again for commenting my write...hugs honeydew.
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Wow...Such a horrible way to see your child go. I'm so sorry for the treatment you had in the hospital. No one should have to go through such an event. I'm sure this was a painful memory to write about, but I'm happy you did. I'm sure one day you will see your child again, in heaven. Thank you for sharing such a beautiful memory with me!
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I am truly sorry for the loss of your child, I have lost 2 children not in this way but another. My heart goes out to you and your family. Do know I agree with you god just had a special plan for him in heaven I'm sure he is now flowing beautifully with a gorgeous set of wings. This poem was amazing, and well deserved of the silver! I felt your pain. Hugs~Nikki
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chilling
and heart-wrenching.
I can't imagine how you must feel.
I had a miscarriage, much earlier on, but I know how difficult it has been for me to deal with that and it seems like nothing compared to what you went through.
You had wonderful descriptions of cold reality of the situation.
I'm so sorry!!! I don't even know what to say.
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That is a sad poem and well written from the heart, I know words can not ease your pain as it surface again.
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Thats so sad. I couldn't even imagine how hard that is. Thanks so much for entering the contest!
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Beautiful
Truly beautiful, It's heart wrenching and full of love. Hugs! I'm so sorry for your loss. With your heart on your sleeve you've penned something incredibly beautiful. Thank you so much for sharing =o) -
I am glad you posted this, this is the first poem I have read on here about this. I know it must of been hard. I really don't know what to say, my eyes are filled with tears, for your loss and for what I once lost. Both different ways, perhaps a different kind of pain. But I thank you for writting this. For gettin courage to open the door again. It is purely beautiful.
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i am so sorry about your loss...but i hope you are doing better now...good luck in my contest
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omg i am so sorry, my ma had the same thing happen to her. i love it. its beautiful. it made me cry, its so sad. thank you so much for entering and good luck.
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Your poem has brought tears to my eyes. I could feel your pain and anguish. What a horrible thing to happen. I am so sorry for your loss. Excellent write. good luck in my contest
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The line about never getting a birth or death certificate really hit me hard. Well done.
Good luck in the contest.
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This is devastating! Your experience has me in tears. Your poem brings your loss to my heart and mind. Very effectively written.
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millergirl..thank you for reading my poem and your applaud I apprecicate it..hugs Honeydew.
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floren...thank you for reading and commenting on my write..time has eased some pain yet I can fecolect as if it were just yesterday..thank you again..hugs Honeydew.
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WOW TOTALLY AMAZING SAD AND HEARTFELT LOVED IT
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Oh. My. Gracious. This poem holds so much meaning and so much power it takes my breath away. The emotion, the love and pain combined, so beautiful in it's wretchidness. A horrible situation and the horrible fear come to life...you are such an incredibly strong person. I'm glad you have found it within yourself to write this to the public. Brilliant.
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Hello Honeydew, I understand not being able to write, especially something so emotional, it is nice to release the thoughts and feelings, but also starts to take its toll if we write about it too much.
If you would like to just create a new "poem" and write a short note to her, I will include it in the "book." I don't write notes anywhere and am not sure I will remember to include a note from you if it's not an "entry." I will try, but if you feel up to it, if you could enter a short note into the contest then I will have it on hand to include and for sure won't forget.
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nutty buddy,,thank you for stopping by to read my poem [Son]..I think you have done a great thing for allowing other poets to enter there write [not to be judged] yet to share with others..
I will enter my poem for others to read and I am also am folloeing your contest...you have some sad and yet inspirational entrys!! I only wish I could write a poem for Asley..yet I find I cant write these days..its been a while since i wrote a new poem..my heart goes out to her please let her know I am thinking about her and my prayers go out to her ..take care ,Honeydew. -
thank you underground love for your comment and the applaud!! god luck with judging you have alot of good entrys !! take care!! honeydew.
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OMG this is so moving! your so good at catching emotions.. im so sorry for your loss..
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Hello Honeydew,
Thank you so much for sharing this poem with me, I am honored. It is amazing how we feel so alone in our experiences sometimes, but then if we gather and we put our experiences out there, we come to find that we are not so alone. I am happy to see that you have found poetry to release your thoughts and feelings, even if it has been a long time since this happened, I know he will always be with you and it is wonderful that you are able to share him with us.
I have written a prayer for those who have lost their children, if you are interested in reading it. My brother-in-law (31) died in February and a coworker's son (20) died in May, and I have met people on AP who have lost their children, which is what prompted me to write the poem.
allpoetry.com/Poem/2108072
Thank you so much for stopping by our contest and sharing. Wishing you all the best.
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Powerful
This is indeed a most devastating loss. To have a part of you whisked away in a metal bowl compounded the hurt and pain of losing the baby. Sometimes, hospitals can be so cold and impersonal; but especially in this case. They should have given both parents a moment with the baby. He should have been wrapped in a blanket so you could have held him. My cousin had a Down's Syndrome baby that was born with a hole in its heart, as well. But my cousin was able to hold the baby and say goodbye. I wish you had that opportunity.
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the pieces of me,..thank you for your condolences...good luck judging!!
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Oh wow, such a sad, flawless piece. Its really wonderfully writen. And I'm really sorry for the loss. Keep up the good writes though. Good luck, and peace *hugs*.
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I think it is so courageous of you to be able to write about this. This is a fabulous piece full of love and I can really tell how much it means to you. I asked for intense and I got it. Thank you for sharing this beautiful write! I'll get back to you when the contest is over...good luck!
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Danzo..thank u for the honorable mention in your contest..like u said ..its not easy to be smooth on such a subject..i was pointing out the way things happenned that day..no real way to rhyme or etc..thanks so much for the honorable!!
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Oooh what a way to end judging this conest.. You're the last entry into this contest to be commented on. I am sorry for your loss. I wont try and understand what its like, but i have a 7 month old daughter and i couldnt imagine life without her.
Its always difficult to write about personal things. I think you did it wonderfully. The flow wasn't so smooth, but I dont think it needs to be in this kind of write.
Thankyou for sharing this with us and entering this contest. Good luck!
Danoz
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Wonderful. I like the flow and honesty. I will comment more intensly as the contest ends, but for now good luck. And I sympathize that this happened. I myself had a miscarrage. Thanks for your entry, and be looking for more comments!!!
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thank you lilgreenwomen for your comment,I appreciate your condolences.
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oh wow this was so sad it almost made me cry the thought of losing a child is devistating im sorry for ur loss great write!!! good luck in my contest!!! alisha
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Bam4U..thank you for your lovely comment...to loss my son was very painful..and to write about it is just as egual..It is my tribute to him..for the dr's seem like he was just a statistic..good luck with your contest I see you have some beautiful entrys..hugs , honeydew
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this is an awesome poem full of passion, pain and love... you are very brave for writing about such a painful subject... it must be really hard and traumatic to think or write about... i cant imagine how much pain you would have gone through... this is a great poem and im super happy you entered it into my contest... i thik you will probably get a place in this contest because this is such a touching piece...good luck in my contest
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intanglio2ring..o my, my heart goes out to you..I could never say anything that wil heal your heart..I can only say that in time your pain will ease,not go away, yet ease some..just know he is in heaven..its been 23 yrs since the loss of my son and your right you never recover..we must some how try to move on.it was very difficult for years for me and my husband to except what happened.i wrote this poem only 2yrs ago..i cried doing so..i asked my husband to read it,he said no,he couldnt bare to read it..and he never did..he passed away 1& 1/2 year ago never to read it..now I write poems of him and how i feel..it helps me to express my feelings and sorrow..well i am rambling on..my heart goes out to you..god bless and take care..if you need someone to talk too i am here..hugs honeydew.
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*tear of pain falls* I too have lost my 3yr old son. Smoke inhalation poisoned his system when we lost our apartment in a fire. You never do recover. Congratulations for winning the GOLD. You've put into words things that I still have a hard time with. -
michelle...thank you for your comment and applaud..it was very difficult to write and still hurts when I read it myself..thanks again..hugs Honeydew
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Uh, heartbreaking and tearful. OH how my heart goes out to you, that must have been so hard. This a poem that will be on my mind for a while.
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bymyself..thank you for commenting on my write..it was difficult to write..its been yrs now yet I think of him everyday..I hope all turns out well for your friend, for theres nothing worse then to loose a child..my sons passing was so unexpected,everything seemed ok till I started labor,an exciting birth turned into tragedy within a few hrs..I have a name for him in my heart...his name is Steven!! good luck with your contest I've read many good entrys..again thank you for commenting and an applaud.hugs honeydew.
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Thank you so much for entering this exceptional and emotional piece. I cant even imagine the pain of loosing a child. I have a close friend who is having problems in a pregnancy (it dosen't help that she is still young)So you can probably see how this hit close to home. I'm very sorry for your loss. Thanx for entering and Good luck.
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well done
This is an incredible piece. Well written and so full of emotion. I cried (along with many others I am sure)as I read your story. God does have all of his children's best interests at heart. We don't always know the reasons why things happen. We must have faith it will always see us through. -
Wow, it has been awhile since a poem on AP has made me bawl. My heart goes out to you and your family. Being a woman and listening to women it is easy for me, and others I am guessing, to forget the point of view of the father in a time such as this. You express it in a beautiful heart wrenching way here. I myself am unable to have children. I feel my pain but perhaps for too long now I have forgotten about my husband's pain. Thank you for opening my eyes by filling them with tears.
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x beauty--Sarah.. thank you for your comment and appluad..I have not read my poem in a while now..It's difficult to do.. I looked and read it just now..its very hard for me to read..yet I CRY NOW !!.. Thank you again, and god bless you..and our little ones!
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O.H M.Y. G.O.S.H... this is amazing... you left me breathless and in tears... this is emotion and strong... just like you must have to be to have gone threw this... and even more... to write about it... I am very touched that you entered this in my contest! Thanks so much! Good luck!
Sarah AKA xXBeauty-Of-DeathXx
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counterclockwise.. thank you for commenting on my poem..it was very difficult to write..I cried the hole time while writing it..yet I wanted to leave him with a tribute of some sort..this is my way of doing so..my heart goes out to your friend..for I have been there..I know he is in Heaven!! hugs..Honeydew
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This happened to a friend of mine, two years ago. It was just heart-wrenching. It was her fifth baby. They were all prepared for her and the day before her due date, she stopped feeling the baby move. She went in to her doctor the next day and there was no heartbeat. He induced labor, and apparently the unbilical chord was excessively long, and there were four knots in it
I am very sorry for your loss. I hope writing about it was theraputic.
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Robin..bless you..sorry for your loss..I know what you have been through..just know all babys go to heaven..you will see her again..also know time heals the pain..never will you forget ..with time we ease our heart ache..bless you..honeydew
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Went through this exact same thing with my first daughter. She lived for about 24 hours and that may have been harder because no matter what they told us, we kept hoping for a turn around. Long day that was. Sorry about your loss. RC
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oh wow. sooo emotional...such a great write. i like how you have described everything in a bitter yet sorrowful tone. the line 'but God!! had better plans for you.' is just fantastic. the exclamation marks give extra meaning to it...gives it 2 ways of reading which was sooo effective at the end in giving a cry of pain. well done, this really made me think. i dont see much wrong at all. keep the great work flowing.
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Wow... very brave of you to write this. Amazing strength. I admire you. This is a beautiful and depressing write. Lovely.
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mzladyt..thank you for your comment and blessings..I do believe God has a reason for everything..I will find out the day I meet him in heaven..It was very difficult writing this..thank you for the applaud..
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I guess there will always be some things that we will never understand. One of them being why God would give you a child and then take them away so suddenly. My heart goes out to you over this. May God bless you. I know you may not want to hear this but God does have a reason for everything. I applaud you for being able to write this beautiful poem.
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devestating. my heart goes out to you, no matter how much time has passed, the heart still aches. very well written poem, your sorrow is truley felt in each line, and still the question of why lingers on the readers mind. the nature of things, all seen and unseen serve a purpose. take care, now
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aw such sad and emo write. i'm very sad this happened to you. it's even worse when you've seen the pictures of your baby moving inside you isn't it? i don't know, this is a great emotional write. it has wonderful imagery (well wonderful as in you had it). great write and thanks for following ALL the rules! good luck.
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thank you piper77 for the applaud on my poem..and luck in the contest i'm in..the tragety of losing a child was bad enough..yet the other side of this is the way me..my husband..and child were treated like that day by staff of the hospital..i've been meaning to write a story to follow this poem..I havent gotten around to doing it..it would probably turn into a book..again thank you for reading and commenting.
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wow......this is was very touching, it was hard to read, that is horrible, I can not begin to even consider such a fate, my blessings and prayers are with you, God bless.
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Wow. That made me almost cry. I'm so sorry for you. I hope you win this contest, I know you deserve it. Your descriptions were strong, and the poem stayed in perfect form the whole way through. Keep up the great work, and good luck!
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Feather..thank you for commenting and applaud..yes it was the end of my world ..yrs have pasted the pain heals..yet never does it leave you..hugs ..honeydew
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medical mistake...thank you for commenting on my write..and yes very painful even yrs later...thank you for the applaud..hugs...honeydew
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sad excellent read
so sorry for your loss,i nowif i lost my son it would be the end my world.i wiould haveanything to life for,he is my life.this is a very touching poem,thankyou for sharing such a beutiful moving poem.
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ntime..thank you for commenting..and yes it was hard to write ..i re-lived each moment with each word..one is forced to live with a loss..its very difficult..thank you again!!
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hmmm that was really deep...Im so sorry for your loss, must have brought you so much pain. *hugz*
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wow...you portrayed a powerful and eloquent poem...i am sorry for your loss and can feel the pain...i don't know if i could have ever brought myself to write about it if it had happened to me...the poem really pulled at my heartstrings because i nearly lost my son in a similar way, but somehow he survived...i am not sure i could have dealt with the loss it is a true fact of reality...we can plan our lives but in the end there are just some things out of our control...again thanks for sharing
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I have just read your poem, I am so sorry for your loss. No one should have to go through this and it saddens me deeply that it happens. Your son will know you loved him dearly and he will be waiting for you, you and his daddy and all his beautiful brothers and sisters that you were blessed with, you are lucky to have them,it must be the most wonderful thing in the world to have children, can't wait to start a family of my own!!x
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regretnbetrayl...thank you so much for your codolences on the loss of my Son..
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awww im so sorry!! this made me want to cry. i'm so sorry. this was great though. good job. thanks for entering my contest and good luck!!
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fallenangel..thank you so much for your comment..yes it was very hard it still is even many yrs later..thank you so much for your comment..hugs...honeydew
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Wow this is so sad. It made me want to cry a bit. I know it would be so hard to lose a child that way. I'm only 13 and I only pray to never lose a child that way. It would kill me I'm sure I couldn't indore the pain of that. I'm sure it made you a stronger person though, Because the things that don't kill you only make you stronger. I'm sorrie it had to happen that way but I'm sure it totally made you a stronger person. Anyways you're an awesomely great writer!!! Keep up the great work. You can come by my site anytime you please.
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celtic-angel...thank you for commenting and the applaud..Ive been thinking on writing a story on this of what all happened..I feel the drs and staff at the hospital justly did us so wrong..thanks again ..hugs ..honeydew
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girlangel19..thank you for the applaud..and for commenting..I am so sorry you had never got to have a mother and daughters love and bond..my heart goes out to you.I am so gratful to still have my other 5 children since the loss of this son..I love them all..thank you again..hugs...homeydew
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oh my god i am so so sorry,for your loss.the apin i felt as i read this poem.my heart achs for you.very powerful and moving poem.
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Oh my what a powerful poem. It has brought tears to my eyes and now the screen is all blurry. I am so sorry for your lose. My mother lost a set of twins before she had me, and my aunt leslie lost triplets. I dont know your pain cause I have never lost a child but I have lost my mother, but not in the way you speak. She has left me to live her life the way she wants to. She was never a mother to me. What a great and powerful piece. Keep up the great work and good luck in the contest. -
sad1976..thank you so much for your condolences..
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PLAYFULANGEL..thank you for your condolences..and comment on saying my poem was a great write..thank you so much..time heals but memories always there..
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wow! i am speechless, i dont know what to say. this was an amazing write, although sad and filled with heartache. i am sorry for your loss, and your pain. but you have written this extremly well, and expressed your emotions greatly. this was a great write.
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keara...thank you for commenting and thank you for your condolences..
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You deserve better words than
I could ever write to you. I am
a mom and just could not imagine.
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A wonderfully written poem, one that was very healing, I am sure. You have expressed your feelings so well and we feel your pain and anguish at this terrible way they treated all of you during this time.
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restlessme...thank you for your condolences..it has been years ago..but my heart and mind still hurts and yerns for him..and yes i will see and hold him one day in heaven.. congratulations on your twins ..god bless..Honeydew
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I am sitting here melting away in my own tears at this poem. First let me say that I am so sorry. The way they treated you and your family seems ruthless. I lost a baby at only 8 weeks along or so after struggling with secondary infertility for over three years. Then another couple of years of infertility until I had twins. They are 8 months old now. I applaud your poem and your tribute to your beautiful son. This is a pain only a parent can know. You will hold your baby some day. Until then, he is sitting upon Gods lap listening to angels singing. -
Seen an old comment,made by montez,very heartbreaking that people can be so cruel,if he felt(it wasn't that good)he should not have commented on it because,his 2 cents, do not matter to that (precious) baby boy in the ground or his parents,or his sisters and brother,you know what,you need to go delete that comment off of your page because it repulses me,makes me sick,to actually say (it's not very good).You know,I would never go to someones poem/write,about a lost loved one and actually have the heartlessness to put it down,people do write personal feelings on AP,and that is what it is here for.montez is just sick,that baby was someones(alot of peoples)loved one so to montez,your words are not worth $h1T,go lose someone and let them put your feelings/your writes down,anyway honeydew,sad,and you know all other people here at AP care,as you can see,love you mom,I love you too my baby brother,daddy is with you now,love you daddy...keep writing mom,you get applaud again and again and again...luvmybabys...
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While i wipe away the tears and say what a powerful poem ,I know only too well how fortunate i was when my last baby was born bt c cection ,The cord was around her neck 6 times .Well done with the poem and i am so so sorry for your loss and how you and your family were treated .
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Beautiful
Thanks for entering the contest, this poem truly tugged at my heart strings
I'm sorry for your loss
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wow. this muct have been such a tragity, and im so sorry a mother has gone through this, but what courage you had to write such a beautiful poem. i am very emotional over this one, great job, and good luck with the contest(*gives a hug)Jen (judge)
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my condolences go out to your family espically your mother..sometimes I feel others think it is not a life if born early or mis-carried..yet one loved the presious life a part of your family..a child, a life,a sister, a brother..its been 23yrs since his passing and it still effects me..yet I have comfort knowing he's a child and is in heaven.god bless..Honeydew
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Hit's a little close to home for me. My sister was lost 6 months (approx) into my mothers pregnancy. It seems that every day I wonder what life would've been like with her around. But no matter what we think, there's a bigger plan out there for each of us. I feel your son and my sister had a much bigger role to play in the afterlife, for they spent so little time on this earth. God be with you always.
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I suspect you've received all those applauses for the emotional content of this piece rather than the structure, and the writing, because IMO, it's not very good.
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Thank you for entering my contest.
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Very, Very Good
Such a cold and chilling poem, but your loving heart and faith have triumphed. For that I am glad. You are a strong woman and I stand in awe of your ability to finally put pen to paper and look it squarely in the face. Lord bless you and keep you. Awe inspiring write.
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I'm very sorry Honeydew. I know the pain. I lost my 18 yr old boy adam 6 months ago. I also lost my son one day old due to complications of respitory (Jeremy) about 17 yrs ago. I'm very sorry. beautiful write
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So sad, loosing a baby that way. My condolences. Write on, poet.
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