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every atom be as one
every flesh be as all
shut your eyes
and trust in your third eye
walk blind and trust to intuition

dream open-eyed actuality
seek knowledge and it shall come;
seek whichever, and it shall come

we are but the dance
of matter and energy--
which is completely manipulable

concentrate
feel the energy flow
to the white light
and the fields of peace
metacognition the mind
open the mind and feel the immensity
of the moment
only to have another moment intercept
in another immensity

every moment is a meditational whim
something is to be revealed in the mist of the unknown
which we wrap so in myth and blood and sweat and tears
and fester in full of fears, yet comes what may

magnetize the True Self
and say hello deep inside yourself
discoveries and treasures lay
behind the thin wall of subconscious
the akashic rhythmic

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  • Minstrel-Morose
    June 2
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    Wow. Great poem. It reminds me of fat people Jk jk

    If I may:
    Please, It's a good poem...It deserves proper capitalization
    Also I dont know if this was done in purpose, but the structure is really ALL OVER THE PLACE which is quite contradictory to the message of the poem
    either way its good GL buddy


    • Lion-Serpent
      June 13
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      Poetry is an extremely open artform and there is no "rule" that says every line must be capitalized.

      I started writing without caps every line when I got into E.E. Cummings' work. It's kind of just stayed that way ever since, except for when I get the whimsy to actually capitalize.

      I mean, as a reader, it doesn't change your experience of the poem except in the sense that it's a usual convention in English. But as I said, poetry goes beyond those bounds.

      Actually, I completely disagree about it being contradictory because it's all over the place. It mirrors the subject matter of the poem. Meditation can be a very all-over-the-place kind of thing. I think it is a restatement of the overall tone and meaning of the poem personally.