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Moon is almost full tonight.
Shinning through the clouds it's beautiful!
I help you, you help me ... no more knots.
"Put on a little of my recovery alubm".
Bunch a good songs I think,
Fernado Ortega,
"MORE LOVE TO THEE"!
It's all Good ... God ... all we want for you!
No Jennine!
Can't stop!
Wont even try to stop ... loving you!
Because knowing His love once,
gift of this family,
we're all resposible!
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Jennine left today.
Has no idea.
Her pain ...
bold,
over the line ... way ... over!
Want to help!
God please show me ... us ... how?
Let us, help us to help her.
We hold her up to You ... for now.
Protect her!
Please Lord protect her!
Want to just hold her, listen,
help her, cry.
Too angery friend, You know I know she needs too.
Can't do this ... when she fights, thrusts her threats around, her anger, at all of us.
Never got to play with her like the boys.
So sad really!
Friend ... sure is sad!
Who to blame now ... ?
Her anger consumes her ... HURTS her Mother!
It's been for her her only assurance.
I know!
Her comfort!
Like with me!
Sad ... so sad for me to say ...
but I'll be dambed,
if I'll let her kill her Mother,
just like her Mother,
and yes ...
don't want it to kill her eather!
God ... no!
Please ... !
In Your mercy,
protect her form herself ...
from this!
Got to protect our boys,
our family!
Her anger will hurt them ... too!
They, like her ... their Mother and so on ...
have been through enough I feel!
Like mine used to consume me ...
my familly!
Almost burried it ...
threw heavyness,
all it exfixyation upon it!
Yes with it ... I rebeld, against my achor, against the very way leading to my freedom!
Won't let it happen anymore,
again ...
if I have anything to do with it.
Yes God ... I have anything to do with it!
Peace is evident within her for me,
I know I can see it ... now.
feel it!
Done some digging myself,
a lot,
will continue!
I know it's my only hope!
Yes it's there!
May be far off ... I know ...
but I see it for her!
"It's always here!
It's the love I have felt,
feel now!
'Between friends,
God ...
and family!
Got to dig real hard and deep within for a time sometimes to finally find it,
see it ...
but it's always there!
Friend, yes ... it is there!
Yes ... friend ... now!
She has no idea how I love her,
the boys,
her Mother!
Like a Father, a friend!
Like I know she loves her Mother, her brothers,
as her Mother loves her ...
like as as well ... do her brothers,
even though it seems ... I know, upon the schene ...
out of nowhere ... the blue,
one day,
I just came!
God please, make it right, for her!
Outstreatched our hands ... remain!
Our heart for her ... are all open!
Sweet-heart,
here with us ...
you-will-always-have-a-home!
Dear-heart!
Please!
All our arms are here,
remain open ...
carry all of our warmth,
for you!
For you dear ... !
FOR YOU!
We understand more than you know ... just as well ... we all understand!
Search your heart, it's always better,
you know we all do!
JENNINE ... you've been through a lot!
We all have sweety we know!
Baby your not alone!
We do care, about you!
Sad ... it's so very sad, not right yes!
So incredibly hard to carry it all alone it is Jennine!
You know?
A brother among brothers, friend among friends, worker among worker and so on yes!
This is all want too!
So when you feel you are ready,
willing to strive together towards this,
baby girl ... YES ... THIS ... you can bet ... !
With us you are always welcome!
You have a warm place in all our hearts!
With us ... you have a home!
If you can take the time,
have the heart to stop ...
look,
you will find it ... SEE IT,
start digging within yourself ...
Spill the milk baby!
We will all help ... with you ... with God,
we are all willing to clean it up together with you!
We all want too!
For you precious!
Yes for you!
Tired too ... we are ... just as weary!
In fact we've already started ... prepared the ground, burried the hatchet!
We love you, we give you this choice, we gave you to God,
because child ... it's always been here, and will remain,
to be your right!
We'er all waiting on you dearness1
Honey your Mother ... she's crying ... so worried, for you.
She wants her baby girl back home!
Wants to hold her ... just you and her dear ...
It's just killing her,
for you to not let her,
be a friend ... Mother!
Yes ... she knows as I do ... as well do your brothers,
it's so hard to believe the words of the broken,
openly blind, this entirely ... lost man,
but regardless my friend,
I hope you know now I too know now ...
without God, His help in this digging,
the labor,
like with me ... the anger will always return,
burry me again,
like it always has done ...
like it is burrying you now girl!
Seperated you, from us ... your family!
So come ... ?
Jennine lets all look at it together,
with the love we all want,
deserve ... feel too,
yes ... for one another!
Jennine ... baby this is the essence ...
what familly truly means,
what intended ... it truly is!
JENNINE ... I'll tell you this ...
"THE THINGS THAT I DON'T UNDERSTAND",
well they scare the hell out of me sometimes too ... still.
I imagine I'm getting better at it though,
because I still desire to be free ...
just like I know ...
we all know ... you do ...
too!
Yes baby no different than us now ...
yes-like-us.
your on the same page,
in the same boat as us!
Above all else, yes all bitterness aside!
Jennine ... your Moma's keeps crying for this for you ...
as do your little brothers,
yes ...
as do I!
This strange man, who is in love with your Mother,
your brothers, you dear-heart,
yes ...
this familly!
We all want you to be happy, with us!
So come home!
Please ... Jennine ... come home ... ?
Please ... !
Your Mother is crying!
This anger that is in you,
sweety we'll work it out ... dig it up by the root ... together!
Please, come home ... ?
JENNINE!
Moons almost full tonight!
Shines here as I sit here under this broken down old porch roof!
Through the clouds ... we can all see it!
Baby it's beautiful!
Signed: Another soul you have helped with his anger!
Your GRATEFUL ... FRIEND!
I'M READY BABY!
HAVE ME MY SHOVEL!
~ James ~
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A contest entry
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Comments
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To be entirely honest after the first few lines I was a bit confused. To me it seems like this is poem of thoughts maybe? I'm not sure I was 707 lines and almost had a heart attack. It is very hard to focus for that long. Nonetheless, thank you for taking the time to enter.
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cheers
Cheers for this entry,as I commented earlier,each and every poem you have placed within this contest,is so very perfect. -
The form here confuses me.
its a bit too spaced out for my liking.
thanks for taking the time to enter
good luck -
AMAZING
This was...phenomenal to read. I think the spacing like that was a great touch, it and the staccato of speaking...the half-sentences and such...it all gave it a very...desperate...feel. I loved it, it moved me so much, and brought me to tears. Thank you so much for entering this!
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first things first I have a major complaint already I think this is unneccisarily spaced out. I think that it would read better and honestly look better if you would close it in. Okay that out of the way I really liked this poem. It really was a good poem on the whole. I think that if you clean this up remove the junk that is keeping this from being great I think you would have quite a work of art. As is though I think it really needs to be looked over again. Its okay to be fancy but don't you think this is going over board? Your poem was wonderful without all that stuff
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I do find the lines rather choppy. I expected the spacing to help the piece flow better but I don't think it helped too much- it was a bit awkward. I would also advise spell check
On a much lighter note, I really enjoyed the line "Got to dig real hard and deep within..." The last two lines were strong and captured my attention well. I bet with a bit of work this could be a fantastic piece. But for now, I'm sorry, it just doesn't quite capture enough emotion for me.
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You come out with your point and the emotion in this is great, but I'm not very fond of some of your lines. They were too choppy.
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wow this was great.
Not sure what "exfixyation" is suppose to be.
but awesome write.
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Wow, quite a powerful poem! I don’t know what to say. However, I did have a bit of a difficult time following it and got lost a few times. Nonetheless, I felt the power of it. Good job. Thanks for entering my contest. I’m honored to read your work.
sss
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I do believe I liked this one even better than the last one, If it is true, and your daughter is really gone, i hope she comes back. Lovely write and lovely words, bravo good chap bravo!
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Option please.
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Very Unique me likey =]
keep up the great work
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Wow
That was too long!
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this is a very powerful and emotional write. interesting form as well. great job.
goodluck and thanks for entering
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shinning --> shining.
this is an interesting poem. the form is unlike that of any i've seen before. but if this helps you release emotion, then you should never stop writing because you should never stop doing anything you love. -
"Who to blame now. "
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Thank you for your entry here. This is more a tender heart write, I didn't see and humour or venting anger so it doesn't fit the prompt. Sorry, but I have to DQ...alby
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when the heart opens to plea
it's genuine love and honesty
isn't it amazing....how the differences disappear
when we realize how connected we truly are....
much love to you James...this took a bite of heart
to spill your ink....I have prayed that my daughter
be...a magnet (a spiritual magnet)
and draw unto her
people of inner might and strength you can help her
get all the questions answered that she feared to ask
and learn how to....see differences as stepping stones
to listening and understanding....
even Jesus needed someone to carry the cross to
Calvary...we are created to need one another.
(whether we like it or not)
sometimes "time" makes that difference!
blessings to you. Jacobs Ladder calls you higher
upon the wrung to witness his awe and grace
otherwise you'll only see..imperfections and
despair.
ears/Seattle
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The struggles of life exists my friend, but we must carry on, and eventually all will be well...
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Thank you for entering;
Okay so, I saw no relevence whatsoever to my contest!
Removing, sorry sweetheart.
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I don't exactly understand how this is a world. But if you would explain then that would be great :]
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This is not really what I was expecting, but it's still a great piece. However, you did not follow the contest guidelines. It's a prose/title prompt and one of the given titles must be the title of your piece. Please apply the rules and I shall return to leave a better comment. Thanks so much!
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Oh My~
This is emotion packed and from beginning to end-I felt this heaviness of anticipation~
Wow~ Powerful piece my Friend and swells the eyes~ Very unique style, presentation~ images grab hard
Thank You for sharing Your Talent
Best wishes in the contest
with love & light~ Desire~*~
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A very emotional and heartfelt poem. Thank you for sharing. Blessings to you.
Peace and Grace, Sandy
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I enjoyed reading this James. Your emotions really take hold with the way it is written. You always bare your soul for the people you love. I feel it every time I read your poems.
Would you like me to add you as a cousin? I think you would be a great addition to my online family.
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I can't say I understand the whole piece, maybe some author's notes would help. Maybe I'm just lame, so I'm not able to grasp the full meaning here. But I can tell you care for others, and this shines through. Having said that, I always appreciate your wonderful heart. Shine on, peace.
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This was beautiful. If this was based on a personal issue, it's amazing of you to care for your friend this way.
Amazing job and good luck with everything.
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