Rock bottom, while it is,
is not that bad.
After all, once arrived,
there is no where else to go
but up.
And having been there twice,
the second time around
is at least comfortingly familiar,
the contours of the confines
not so strange to the eyes.
Looking around, we see
shattered pieces, not only
of our lives, but those
of others
remnants of dreams long forgotten.
Wishes unfulfilled,
borken hearts and dreams,
life gone awry,
patterns of futility,
shadows of others
Who, like us,
fell from grace
in the eyes of others,
maybe even themselves
unforgiven by either.
We lie there on the rocks,
letting the sharp edges
pierce our skin, bleed the guilt from our souls
seeking redemption in
the resulting pain.
At least this pain is one
we cause ourselves,
not laid upon the alter
of our lives and sacrificed
by those we loved,
and love so well.
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My quiet life has had the usual vicssitudes and sadnesses, but I do not recall ever feeling at rock bottom -- and if I did, I am fairly sure I should find that quickly enough, the bottom would fall out of the rock in a whirl of grief, sadness, sickness and madness. So perhaps, for once, I should refrain from commenting on what I do not know.
It seems good, especially the earlier verses.
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This is a very deep poem that can be about so many different things. Life going up and down is one, but also the emotions and the loneliness you can feel sometimes is another.
You can be thronged by a million people, yet still feel completely invisible. But that's just one of the things I got from reading your writing. Another part that was very emotional was the part about how we can put ourselves through pain and seek redemption through it. Almost as if she were paying her own price with her blood.
I think this is a very good, good poem that truly puts an entire lifetime together all in one short, deep little poem.
Great job!
~Keirii
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Very insipring, and relatable. I really like this, I think everyone at some point has hit rock bottom. Thanks for sharing
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Wow this is powerful and profound. Words from one that truly understands. I too have hit rock bottom , only to rebound & become even stronger. Bless those that never travel such a road. well done.
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What is perceived to be a curse at the time when it happens to us, may much later reveal itself to be a blessing that shaped us in order to survive events far removed in time from that accident or handle situations better than we may have been capable of before. It rarely complies with the wishes and desires we had at the time. When being on rock bottom often changes what we perceive to important in life. Thank you for creating and sharing. Take care.
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A nicely written poem ... I think that perhaps the majority of us can all relate to the words that you have penned so well.
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Very deep and very beautiful. I really loved the last stanza. This was written well, and touched my heart. Continue the writing.
Evemauy
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I love how you're looking at the positives of the worst in this piece. You're feelings are spoken fluently. Rock bottom is a hard place to hit so it shows real strength to climb out even once let alone twice! Nice Work!
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Yes you said that well and could not have said it better.
Think we have been there at least once but some twice , and have you hear of someone being there three times ? Would like to know. But we all seem to just dust ourselves off and go for another round , and well believe it or not that's all we can do. This was well written and thanks for it really has its points and thanks will look forward to more of your work. -
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Thank you for your kind comment.
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I can feel every word of this piece.
Have been at the bottom a time or two myself.
But, as you've so perfectly written, once there the only othe way is up.
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Very nice poem here.
Nice word choice and love the way it's put togehter. -
Hi, thanks for entering my contest, but this is not what I really was expecting. I wanted emotion and feeling of depression. If you would like to enter again you are more then welcome to. I mean this is a fine piece, but just not what I was looking for. Im sorry.
xXHatedxXAngelxX
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this was well written and unique
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Excellent Laurie , your words are strong and paint a vivid picture my dear friend. Hope all is well at your camp... ..mal
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