My tears aren’t enough to bring you back
The ache in my chest won’t go away
When I told you that I wanted you to leave
I really didn’t mean it
I just wanted space,
Not an eternity apart
Never again will I see your smile,
Nor will I ever be safe in your arms
I’ll never be able to call you after a fight with my dad
I can’t say I love you.
And no matter how loud they are,
My screams will never reach your decomposing ears
My bitter, angry sobs will never be comforted by your voice
Even now, as my eyes leak briny acid
You will never know it.
I’ve been numb for two weeks
Barely getting through the day
Expecting to see you across the street
On your way to school
Then realizing that you’ll never follow your dreams
You’ll never graduate
Or get into college
You’ll never see me dance again
We won’t ever get married
Or have children
Remember when we promised to always be there?
You broke that promise…
…and my heart.
I miss you.
But no matter how many times I say it
You’re never coming back.
Author notes
I have never had anyone close to me die before, but i definitly cried writing this.
There was another poem i wrote for a similar contest, here's the link in case you were curious.
http://allpoetry.com/poem/4298541
A contest entry
- Upset me, if you can. by DesolatELifE.
1000 points, ended June 18, 56 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - creative prose. by sideways hourglass.
700 points, ended June 7, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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omg this is so brilliant yet so sad so amazing...every word and every line leaks out deep emotion and reading it makes me tear down myself...im so sorry for you..youre a great poet...lovved reading this..
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awwww
Well i really like this poem. It really do hurts when you love some body and that person leaves you.Its real heart breaking.
And no matter how loud they are,
My screams will never reach your decomposing ears
My bitter, angry sobs will never be comforted by your voice
Even now, as my eyes leak briny acid
You will never know it.
These lines are very good.
Keep writing
Stay happy
Lucky.
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this is very beautiful to read. I can't help but see a connection in the line 'You’ll never see me dance again' and you're own pen name 'Dancing Alone'. It may be a wild shot in the dark though, considering this is a fictional event as you say in the author notes.
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for a stab in the dark, that wasn't a bad observation. though it wasn't done on purpose, its just that the person this was written for knows of my passion for dance (( and we tore up the dance floor at the homecoming dance =] ))
dancing is a large piece of our relationship, and thinking of him never seeing me dancing again is serious heartbreak.
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It's not bad. The problem though ... this is poetry, not prose. Prose doesn't have line breaks.
Regardless, this was an enjoyable read.
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ohhh, i see, sorry then....but thanks, i didn't know that bit of info =]
thanks
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I'm glad you haven't had to experience this. I haven't, either. Not someone that close.
I imagine it sometimes, too. Nothing would hurt more. You portrayed that nicely. Good job. Thanks.
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Oh my gosh. I'm so sorry for your loss. This is heartbreaking and so emotional. I hope that you get through this.
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I'm actually fine, it was written as though i had lost someone, but i never have...thanks anyways =]
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Soft Anger
This is beautifully written and releasing. Soft anger, in my opinion, is a hard quiet pain that can be paralizing, with the fact of knowing there is nothing you can possibly change. Beautiful words that are so sadly deep.
Peace be with you
God's touch
Jeri
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whoa
I think it's very realistic. I don't think that it really fills any rhyme pattern, or structure, but with something like this, I don't think that is has to. I really felt the emotion reading this. Well done!
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Good, and full of emotion.
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There is a deep, sad reality to this, seems as though it was an experience you actually had. Well written.
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truth mixed in with your carefully chosen words...
truly a good write -
Wonderful...appeals and goes into depths.....keep it going.
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beautiful yet heartwrenching. i love the descriptions, and it does seem pretty realistic.
"My screams will never reach your decomposing ears
My bitter, angry sobs will never be comforted by your voice"
-nice :]
keep on keepin' on,
hisxlastxregret
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WoW
That was Deep...............
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thanks
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