We marvel at the summer, don't we?
All the dewy hilted grass blades
soldiers of a green empire
that tickles fiercely at our feet
Do we know, Lord Sleep, why?
Why we lay in rapture with summer
with all the warm beauty before us
when it speaks nothing of our lives?
What of autumn's clumsy seduction?
The cold cloak of bronze and ruby
The somber fall of living things
The mirror to our moldy souls
But perhaps the verdant dream
Is a rapier-point to the moment
When we laid sated on a tiny army
Dragonflies chopping by
Feeling at last
Invincible
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Welcome to the finalists list.
--Katie. -
wonderful imagery.
stunning write.
good luck in your contests -
Very beautiful imagery, especially the dragonflies. Your words are amazing, and I am in awe of this write.
Thank you so much for your entry. -
Third stanza: wow. Autumn is very dear to me and I've seen many slaughter it, but you did nothing of the sort. Normally I'm opposed to poems around nature as, apart from in Autumn I find very little inspiration but this was very impressive.
Good work and thank you for your entry.
--Katie. -
Brilliance at its best
I love the wording you use and your style of writing. It all makes perfect sense and the descriptions are magnificent. I felt enraptured by the summer and for me, this would be a hard subject to write about, but you have done it beautifully.
Maria
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you are a very descriptive poet, your word choice alone is a peek into heaven. even though I tend to cling to uglier things, I really like this poem. nice work.
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Beautiful descriptors as usual. I love the Dragonflies chopping by. I can really see that.
I'm not sure why you brought Autumn into it. That stanza, while I can see the relation somewhat, seems like it deserves its own poem almost.
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