Never in pain
'cause before it hurts
I'm already stoned,
I'm alone even in a crowed of unknowns,
don't have the cash for headphones
to drown out the insults and hate cults,
but it almost seems to late
for my fate to be real,
unless the strings are cut now,
and I'm dead and gone,
let it all unfold,
i was done living when I was born,
truth be told.
Author notes
um idk most times i get in trouble by the person i wrote the poem about or the person who made me feel like this if i say its about them haha so I will say nothing lol
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very touching
good one . the expression is great. good job.
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Wow, I am beyond speechless for words. Very relateable. ^^ I like the rhyme and flow. It goes great with the poem. You are not done living when you were born. That is flase. Not truth at all. Anyway powerful emotion. Great write.
You will make it through. Don't worry 
- Maria ♥
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interesting....i've had this feeling before. I'm always around people that i really don't care about or just in a crowd in school and i've not had my ipod to drownd them out so i end up drownding in the end. you're very good at writting. I like this alot. you seem like a very....deep person. we should talk sometime
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yeah say nothing. Thats wat i do. ha
But i really like this. It's super good!!!!
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damnies Shawn this is amazing! I reread this one multiple times!!! good work!!!
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The first 3 lines numb us to the effect of the rest
Nice rhythm set up in the next lines, and the line length decreases as if the person is fading out. It's not sentimental, but resigned and leaves us feeling exhauted even though it's short. Yet we can read it again and again.
A good title also.
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i loveee it alott
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i love it, mayne you should tell who its about.
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lovely
I liked this.. Even though it was sad.. Sometimes people get sad, and this is the best way for us to express. You did a wonderful job and I love all of your poems!
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"i was done living when i was born"
...only you have the power to change your life..you are strong enough for this Shawn..
amazing write, you are such a wonderful poet. i really enjoyed this even though it was very sad. so well done!!
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really good shawn
i really likeed it can't wait for the next one -
just a typo
"but it almost seems to late"
i think you mean "too" not "to"
But otherwise i really like this poem. One can relate to this very well. At least I know i can. Great Job, I loved the flow and it was really good to me. Tottally gets three clappers.
Just keep writing, just keep writing......
~Silky~
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