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Runaway

Somewhere in the night
Someone spoke of fright
Somewhere in the day
A child left his home
and ran far away

Children run away everyday
No matter what we say
No matter how hard we pray
And still they run away

Is something wrong?
Should we talk more of truth?
Should we pray until dawn?
Yet they are still gone

And we ask what went wrong

Are the children that strong-
to trust themselves alone?
Decide what is right or wrong-
for them on their own?

Let them begone-
mother of a child's song
Let them be free-
father who tries so hard to see

Pray for them to be warm-
and be what they wish to be

For all children-
are meant to be who they are

  And granted every possibility--

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No. 5

A contest entry

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  • Jepardy
    September 22

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    I love the rhyme in this and the flow to it. You leave a very thought provoking message with this. Very well done. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck to you.


  • Heva Feva
    July 3

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    "Children run away everyday
    No matter what we say
    No matter how hard we pray
    And still they run away”

    These are my favourite lines! Thanks for entering my contest and good luck.
    -heva♫


  • EmbraceTheJourney
    June 28

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    Good Luck!

    This is wonderful. The rhyme is well done and the point is well well written. It is also so true. If parents would let children be who they are instead of putting impossible expectations on their shoulders there would be less running and more loving. Thanks for entering.

    ~Tabitha


  • Maggie Kay gold member
    June 12

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    For all children-
    are meant to be who they are

    And granted every possibility--

    this is such a perfect way to end such a great peice. i loved it and its so down to earth and true.
    children will continue to run away no matter what u say or do to try and stop them. childs go threw alot of problems but we manage to learn to hide most of them, and we hide from it all till it gets top much, we feel we m\need to leave.
    overall a great poem that i absolutly loved!
    kmp


  • dieu.
    June 12
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    No Rhyme.

    I'm DQ-ing. Read the rules next time.

  • Rae2732
    June 7

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    this line
    "and we ask what went wrong"
    is true for a lot of things.
    looking back we always wonder why things happened the way they did


  • Budart
    June 4
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    The rhyming is too repetitive. You need to find another word or phrase other than "wrong" it is used three times. The rhyming scheme varies from stanza to stanza. Get a system and stick to it. As it is the rhyming is chaotic and opportunistic. It never builds any momentum.

    My apologies in advance.


  • forbidden-colour
    June 3
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    I really don't see how this is fitting with my contest.

    Sorry to say.

  • OurxBeginning
    June 2

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    A very true write on society and runaways. You rhymed quite well, wasn't forced at all. Nice inspiring ending, so true. Thanks for entering and good luck.


  • teddybare
    June 2
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    ok

    each has thier own mind dont they ? lol nice write

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