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Parental advisory may cause banishment and/or judgments.

I wish could I die with you
  so I could kill you in Hell-
  ...over and over again...

Remember, when you face me:
                  I gift
              No        morals.

"I said to Be
                Lie
                Ve!"

Henna never heals..
  Henna never heals..

This is illegal music
                      lyrics
              going against all rules of
      humanity.
Parental advisory may cause banishment.

I credit the Brays
                    Dins
      and        Fucks
  for this eerie art
born from
  the womb of Satan.

Let me give you
        Ink
    Poisoning.

He's two-faced - He's two faced-
                          - headless
Told me to      be    lie    ve.

I faced reality following
the inauguration
            then I fell to regret
like reliving
  a discriminative war
        created through
infamous revenge
        that the phoenix lusted for
  then the abolishing of
  desperate confessions
        killed him.

I remember seeing cupid
  shoot a        $
and a swastika.

Fuck you cupid..
  Fuck you cupid..
    Fuck you cupid..

This is illegal music
                      lyrics
              against all rules of
      humanity.
Parental advisory may cause banishment.

I want to die with you
  so I can kill you in Hell-
  ...over and over again...

"Be
  LieVe"
He said.

Are you afraid of what I'm capable of?
    If not
I'm not afraid to hurt you.

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  • etoile
    June 8

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    this is some crazy shit. I liked the anger in this piece, it's pretty powerful. it would probably be better if I could here the music that goes along with this. oh well.

    goodluck and thanks for entering


  • Bullets
    June 2

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    I do not understand how this is a world. But feel free to explaine that.

    There is lots of deep hate in this poem. It gives me shivers and makes me afraid. Don't ever get mad at me please :]
    Good luck
    -Bullets

    • This poem is a world I've created for an album in the process of the band's approval. It's a world I've created for a particular person of whom truly has "fucked me over" recently. His name is Braedyn, inspiring the lines:
      "I credit the Brays
      Dins
      and Fucks
      for this eerie art
      born from
      the womb of Satan."
      I want to take him to this place through this music and murder him over and over again, metaphorically of course.
      (hence the lines:
      I wish could I die with you
      so I could kill you in Hell-
      ...over and over again...)

      It's kind of my view of the afterlife and Hell.


  • Daxteriana
    June 1

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    nice use of the words to cause fear...well, somewhat because I didn't feel any form of fear towards you or this poem. Still an amazing work of art.

    Daxteriana

    • Thanks, this is a piece for an album though, so the fear sets in with the vocals and sounds.

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