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Sunlight

Sitting in complete aware
She lets the sunlight echo through her hair
A night of love
Followed by a morning hug
A husband, a heaven
A man in which she is never bored
This ex whore
Has found one who she can love
While he is off to work
She sits so comfortably
This day is perfect
Until a man in a black ski mask
Is what she see's

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hmm... I like this

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  • awannabepoet
    August 13

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    Well, you took this prompt to a dark place but if it feels comfortable in your mind who is to say what is good and what is bad.

    Long live poetry, long live otepsaint.


  • Callisto Athena gold member
    June 2

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    Er, ah, very different take on the prompt, a bit scary.. Thanks for entering..