Her poetry showed an original mind
not like other teens
but she never had a chance to discover
herself
did she need strength?
she needed acceptance
wanted freedom to find it and herself.
I wonder who she would have been?
A poet
or some wilted thing?
without her chance
to change and grow
the world and I will never know.
No friends in her life
only trivial kids
who wouldn't talk to her twice
your needs grew so strong
and pushed her from her family
and then the ones
she needed so...
Beat her to death
and left her corpse...
Alone.
Author notes
Reena Virk lived in Victoria, BC. Other kids at school ridiculed her for her big size. Her need for acceptance led her to find her companions with bad girls. One night they lured her under a bridge and beat her up. Two returned and killed her by holding her head under the water. She was fourteen years old.
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SAD , VERY SAD
It is stories like this one here which years ago one heard of once in a great while. The way society has come this is something one has seen happen time and time again. We as people are definitely going in the wrong direction.
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NICE
I FELT THE SAME AT ON TIME IN MY LIFE I NEVER THOUGHT I COULD LIVE DIFFERENTLY FROM WHAT I HAD BEEN A WAS UNSURE ABOUT GOD BUT I WANTED CHANGE SO MUCH I FIGURED IT WOULDNT HURT TO TRY HIM OUT IT TOOK SEVERAL MONTHS TO RELIZE HE IS VERY MUCH SO HERE FOR US IF YOU CAN LEARN TO TRUST IN HIM AS YOU MAY HAVE SOMEONE ELSE WHO HAD HURT YOU YOU WILL SEE HE ONLY LOVES YOU HE JUST WANTS YOU TO BE THE ONE TO MAKE UP YOUR MIND FOR YOU IF YOU WANT TO GROW AND BE FREE HE IS THE WAY ONCE YOU MAKE THAT FIRST STEP TOWARDS HIM EVEN IF YOU JUST GET ON YOUR KNEES AND PRAY TO HIM IN YOUR HOUSE THAT SHOWS FAITH AND YOULL SEE WHAT WILL HAPPEN IT WILL BE THE BEGINING OF A NEW RELATIONSHIP READ A CHAPTER FROM PROVERBS EVERY DAY FOR EXAMPLE TODAY IS THE TENTH SO READ CHPT 10 THERE ARE 31 PROVERBS SO AS EACH DAY GOS BYE READ THE CHPTER FOR THAT DAY EVERY MONTH DO THE SAME UNTIL YOU WANT TO VENTURE DEEPER INTO THE WORD OF GOD. GOD LESS. P.S CHECK OUT MY NEW POEM PLEASE
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So Sad
My heart while reading went out to all teens, and Reena Virk. You have made her live on by writing her story.
This doesnt have to have flow or rhyme because this is freeverse at it's best even though it is such a sad subject.
Yes teens need talked too not disrespect, the sad fact is most people these days put there nose in the air, think they are better.
This should never happen and it should not have happened to Reena Virk.
Great writing
It was a honor,
~Lisa~
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What a sad ordeal...
and one that has obviously stricken teenagers more than on a few occasions. Teenager's are mean now because they neither receive the care or discipline they need so they can't show it to others and how sad it is that there are casualty. Sad but poignant celadia.
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I love and hate this poem.... Loved it because I read it and could feel it... All teens feel the need for acceptance at some point and that is something any reader could relate to... Love the structure... Especially how "herself" stands alone... Favorite line: "I wonder who she would have been?
A poet
or some wilted thing?"...
Only "flow" problem is the "grow/know" rhyme... Doesn't really fit into the overall tone... The "so/alone" one is more subtle and works because it's a great ending...
Hated it because after I read it I saw the author's note... That's not the poem's fault, though... Well done and thanks for sharing...
Peace,
Russell
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Great poem
I really like this realistic view of how young people treat each other in school. I am a Middle School teacher and I have seen this kind of behavior become more prominent in our schools over the years. You did a good job of just stating the facts, feelings of this young girl. I don't mean to sound biased but the girls at this age can be extremely cruel. Your poem is horrifyingly true. There are many wonderful kids but there are some "bad seeds" that need to be stopped. As a teacher, I gave many "sermons" on kindness, and "put yourself in someone else's shoes and walk around awhile,"...I was passionate about making sure they knew they would be held accountable. Other kids and teachers need to help each other.
Great poem....very relevant for today.
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GOD!
I can take this poem and definitely make it seem as though it is to someone I know very dear to my heart.
This is an excellent write
I wish a talented person as this wouldn't go to waste
Thanks so much for the entry.
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wow, a brilliant heartfelt emotional poem, this world is so cruel, we proclaim love and acceptance and yet i can´t help but feel that maybe things are getting worse.
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The poem so sadly expressed
painted such a life of heart ache and tears
Acceptance of whom she may have been to who she was
and that tragic ending of which you highlighted in your AN
I often question why!
Thank you and best wishes to you
Julie -
displays the anguish of of a teenagers life. i like the end "Beat her t death and left her corpse...alone" was a way more powerful way of showing that she died. good write
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That was such a sad case. Good write, well done.
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