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you found me

 

The fields told you the truth, didn't they?

How I ran through them, to find a way out of hell.

I wanted a clearer view. Life was looking so blurry and bleak.

 

And I finally felt free, laying half alive

under Gemini and watching him shine.

I spoke to the seasons because I felt so alone,

even as the animals kept me from getting cold.

[I hate evenings.]

 

I awoke, half dazed, only to see

your face a hundred yards away.

Trying not to cry, I thought to myself,

"I thought everyone forgot about me. But no, you found me."

 

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Pic Credit: http://mr-twingo.deviantart.com/art/from-pluto-123332802

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  • twelfthknight silver member
    June 27

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    a very interesting, thought provoking poem, very well written, congratulations on winning silver x


  • Diminished Capacity gold member
    June 26

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    This is absolutely breathtaking. You had me from beginning to end. I can't even tell you my favorite parts, I'd be posting the entire write. Thank you so much for entering.


  • queenie
    June 11

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    there are great lines in this and it is very expressive as well as impressive. i like the way your words embraces the image. as you look at the image you can hear these words as her private thoughts. this is so very good. my best to you in the contest.


  • Borntowriteforever
    June 1
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    I lost my breath for a moment after reading this. wow, this holds such beauty. lovely work


  • chasing rainbows
    June 1
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    PLEASE PLEASE MARRY ME


    • lowercase prelude gold member
      June 1
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      Wow, you liked it that much, huh?
      I don't think I can marry you, but you can always keep reading what I write

      Thanks for the comment


  • DeathlyAngel
    June 1

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    Its a bit sad, but its really good. I like it.
    Good luck in my contest


  • hisaddiction
    June 1
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    Oh..

    This makes me sad a bit..but a bit happy too. i loved this.~thanks sweetie

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