Oh how the hate reverberates through my being,
Such evil in my pure forgotten eyes.
Delve deep and feel the evil suck you in,
My brain denying all forms of promise,
My soul destroying all that you can give.
Why oh why - distrust my only alliance
And where footsteps tread - I feel your paranoia,
Seeping into me - a stain of mistrust and fear.
Dictate your poison - make me,
Streak asbestos through me.
Deservedly I take it. Deservedly forsake it
Throw me no line, no hope, no desire to be free.
I am but a shadow of myself,
Loosing ever deeper to the beast chained inside.
Don’t feel sorry for me - I shall reap what I have sewn
And evermore shall dance with my own shadow only
And wonder how did this come to be?
Hate and evil - from the dormant volcano
That is me and my honesty.
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This is a hard way to look at yourself. I hope that you can pull out of this funk. This was a very good poem full of emmotins. Thank you for reading one of my poems that means a lot glad you enjoyed it SH
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*oxtail soup* this poem possesses power, it is enticing!
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You posess inticement..This is dark,,sensual.I can feel your emotions..They open themselves to all of us.Your imagery is perfect.Your thought expression is great....good for you poet..fabulous write...congrats
John
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Very emotional piece of poetry. I can feel the sad expression presented in this. WOW...THIS WAS GOOD!
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a good dark piece, ah we all slip into the lanes of insanity here and there where hate and dark thoughts scream the shape of us.
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Thank you very much for time to read this. You are such a talented poet and It makes me feel good to know you liked it. I really appreciate your comment, thanks.
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Simply Amazing
I love this.
There is so much emotion and thought put into this.
I would like to ask your permission to put this in a book I am creating.
You WILL be created, as will everyone else who is putting work into my book.
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Sure - thank you for your comment.
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A lot of feeling in this poem. The only way out of negative thoughts is to replace them one at a time by positive thoughts. Perhaps by going to uplifting movies or walking in nature, etc. may help, too. It is hard, but can be done. There is medicine to help those in dire need.
There are good and evil thoughts in all people. The good will remain when the evil is let go. If analyzed, evil is really a fear in some form, a false fear. We all have these fears. It's part of the human experience.
Everything is either love or a call for love.
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That's true, sometimes though it can be so overwhelming. Think I felt like this when I wrote it. Thanks for your insightful comment.
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Perfection
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still in awe
wow-really great write! I had to reread, cuz it was so how I feel about myself!! Very descriptive, emotional, and real!! You described me, and I am sure many other to a Tee! Hate and evil- from the dormant volcano- That is me!! yeah kinda scary how closely your description fits so many!! wow-keep on pennnin your thoughts, excellent imagery, definitely felt the emotion in this write!! look forward 2 readin more..
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Thank you so much for your kind comments
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your words are like recently sharpened daggers that slice the page very fiercely with anger and regret. This was a wonderful display of emotions and i ejoed reading it...keep writing..much <3 scars
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Thank you, I liked your description of it!
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Speechless
For a while, I was speechless. Amazing! You are extremely talented, I have been writing for a long time, but never have I written anything as brilliant as this. Added you as a favourite, will be reading more.
Thanks for sharing,
And keep writing,
'Cause you've got a little fan Lol.
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I know that's not true as I've read some of your work!! Thank you though for your comment, it is appreciated.
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wow.. a very very emotional piece.. all described so vividly. very well written. "i am but a shadow of myself". i love it.. a very good poem. great job.
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Thanks Your comment is appreciated.
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