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I saw the end before the dream
and drawing closer still;
a looming cloud molded in sleep
and fluffed with candied pills.
So sweet, so toxically they taste
with rotting bed-time smells.
This is all I know of parting,
and all I need as well.

Author notes

Option 2: Inspired by Emily Dickinson's poem, "Parting."
Image: Emily Dickinson's portrait, as depicted on the mural at West Cemetery.


I made certain it could be sung to the tune, "yellow rose of texas"

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  • Night Hope gold member
    June 19

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    A melancholy penning, Poet, inspired by the depths of the Belle's numerous works. Well done. I have this same picture on my list, "Inspired by Emily Dickinson", as well as many others, including various sources of information. I also receive emails from the Amherst Museum.




  • The Fun House silver member
    June 12

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    Very cute and you did really well with your rhyme scheme in this piece. It flows as lovely as a song read aloud


  • Draig aine gold member
    June 1
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    sigh

    just sigh