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Newfound Distance

Closeness, I only wanted to be next to you
Longed for your warmth against my cold skin
Wanted to be all you wanted, all you could ask for
I could be all that and more, if you'd let me

Such great friends, we two were
Talk all day, into the night
What great connection, at least, that I felt
The sudden urge to hold you when your eyes met mine

Now your warm green gaze has turned to ice
The drama between everyone has chilled us
And that heat I felt wafting off of you
Now alternately scalds and freezes me

This new distance tears at me
Your past words resounding in my head
We might as well be strangers now,
For nothing real is said anymore
And few glances are met or spared.

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  • Balldinger silver member
    June 1
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    with stinging precision and full awareness of delivery. a poem of stated sorrow.

    • Thanks... The distance between him and I really gets to me. It was seriously amazing, we'd talk literally 17/7, stopping only for sleep. And now.. Rargh.

      Thanks for the comment