wild wind
the roof blows off
as we argue
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ah ha
I like very much, miss you
Annie
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words yelled into an wild wind
the roof blows off
I go to sleep angry
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i really like this one
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This is very strong. I like the suggestiveness in this without telling what the argument is like. Very much enjoyed.
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huh interesting write. true in both senses. i like how it could be a wild wind when you argue but also when literal wind comes through. nice job great write many props.
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both ways
Yes, thank you very much - you're completely accurate about this haiku.
cheers,
myron.
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Excellent!
I will say that, personally, I'm not very proficient at writing effective and captivating haikus, so I have to give you major kudos. Its a style I'd really like to advance myself on.
Very natural in tone, but it leaves the reader wanting more, as though the nature-theme is metaphorical for something much deeper (which I'm pretty sure it is).
I'm not sure why you'd want to revise this, its pretty good in my opinion.
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Leth
Thanks for reading this and for leaving a nice comment for me. I like what you have to say about this resonating haiku.
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LOVE IT...very powerful!!!..thank you for sharing
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hi, that's quite an aha-moment! Speaking about the power of words....very clean images, excellent done. I really enjoyed this one
Erwin
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a wonderful haiku I love this thank you for sharing
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You're welcome!
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