Alone on the decks
And the stench of the sea
All scents brush aside
Settle Down upon me
The endless velvet blue
Sinking below
The coral of vibrant colors
Only I could once see and believe
But I have no reflection
And I know soon
The sea life will be dead like me
I leave all the ones who loved
To their cares I was blind
Now I run away from my shame
For the one being left behind
I'm leaving, to start over the same life
Author notes
Written March 15th, 2004
A contest entry
- Contest for new March members ~Come Sail Away~ by Barbara.
300 points, ended April 3, 2004, 49 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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A lot of sadness in this poem - but it speaks volumes. A good entry for the contest and thank you
Good Luck
~Von~ -
Very nicely done LunaMoon085 I enjoyed your descriptions and thank you for entering. Good luck and welcome to the site.
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nice entry...i am not all that great with abstract so i won't comment further!..good luck in the contest!..hugs..leanne xx
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Interesting write the imagery is to me of a young girl away but so unsure, Good luck!
Lakota x -
An interesting take on the painting! Some very good images.
Your rhyme scheme changes, but other than that, it's a very good write. Thank you for your entry! CookieZeal
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Nicely written, with a good flow and imagery. The idea of running away on the ship is intriguing.
Thank you for entering this
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