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Don't Close Your Eyes

Don't close your eyes
Stop
Take a look
At what you're missing

Standing here
Waiting just for you

Reach out
Take my hand
And feel me

Open the curtain
To your heart
Take a breath
There's so much to feel

Buildings crumbling
Falling down
The world struggles
But people still smile

Don't let the world
Bring you down
For I will lift you
In my arms if you need

Don't close your eyes
Don't shut me out
For without you
I've no reason to be

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  • Bianca Melody
    June 28
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    lovely write.
    x


  • Sandygram
    June 4

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    Very Romantic

    This one touches the heart dear friend. A lovely love poem. Brought a smile this morning. You take care.
    Hugs and Smiles, Sandy


    • faderman1959
      June 4
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      Hey sandy! Thanks for the visit and the read! A smile is worth more than anything.


  • Swangrnv gold member
    June 2
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    amazing write..

    my man! niiiiiiiiiiicccee....


  • Child of Water
    June 1

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    I think my favorite part of this piece is the line "don't close your eyes", after all, you don't want to miss anything right? I am always impressed when someone can write a love poem that has hope and sweetness in it because mine are normally sad and reminiscent...haha. Thank you for sharing something wonderfully sweet and hope filled.
    Best wishes

    • faderman1959
      June 2
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      Hey child! Its great to see you. I hope you have been well. You know me, I love a love story. Your right you don't want to miss anything. Thanks for stopping in and reading.


  • Lagrimas
    June 1

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    I might have to steal the title *grin*

    Oh I love it, and the title gave me an idea. If it comes together I'm going to have to dedicate it to this poem and you. Again nice write, I enjoyed it and it helped inspire an idea in me.

    • faderman1959
      June 1
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      I just read it! I loved the way you made it your own! Thanks for stopping by and reading mine. I'm glad you enjoyed it!


  • DeJaBlue gold member
    June 1

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    Very romantic, soft, and sweet.

    "Don't let the world
    Bring you down
    For I will lift you
    In my arms if you need ".....love that part


  • Raspy
    June 1

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    Beautiful

    I never close my eyes honey. I give thanks to GOD.
    My eyes are open wide...sweetie.
    Enjoyed this !


    • faderman1959
      June 1
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      I'm glad you enjoyed it! Free verse is tough for me, too much freedom.


  • Daizee silver member
    May 31

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    Your words are a definite bright spot in a world that can be so bleak. It's comforting to know that there are people like you out there.

    Love,
    Stacy

  • amysticwriter silver member
    May 31
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    love this write, I'm a hand holder...but it's been a while...


  • Rheea gold member
    May 31
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    The world is frighting , we must be brave. I like this white knights are still out there.

    • faderman1959
      June 1
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      Yes there arewhite knights! And princesses also! You just have to look through all the troubles in the world. Thanks alyana.


  • stop a bullet
    May 31

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    A great write filled with emotion. flows really well and the wording is good. i love the last stanza.. is ties everything together really well. great write!

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