If I could go back now,
If I could change my ways,
Everything would be so different,
I would’ve shut my mouth,
Wouldn’t have let a single thing out,
And I never would’ve lied to you,
Now it’s too late,
My heart is heavy and torn,
I know this is all my fault,
I hate what I’ve done,
Now I stand on my own,
These walls I’m locked inside seem to understand,
I think they can hear me,
Why can’t I just be free?
Everything I can’t do,
Reminds me of you,
It’s never been your fault,
So I’ve learned to blame myself,
Now can you just come back,
Please forgive me,
Open your heart,
Try to understand,
I can’t go on without you,
Tonight I won’t sleep,
I’ll spend the night fighting myself,
Fighting this guard I put up against you,
Go back and memorize,
Every single word I’ve said,
Forget all the lies,
I want you to be with me,
Please forgive me,
Don't forget me,
I want to hear you don't regret me
A contest entry
- The sun in my soul's sinking lower while the hope in my hands turns to clay. by coloringmysenses.
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Very good - it feels like lyrics to me.
A suggestion I'm going to put in is to vary your line structure as well as your punctuation. I think it will help the reader to see the better flow in it.
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Very emotional and well written. -
Good work my dear
I can feel what you mean exactly
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