I am a pretty flower
with petals open wide
I hope within the hour
that you will step inside.
Dear Bumble Bee I'm waiting,
for you to come and see
the picture I am painting
So will you play with me.
You'll buzz around my petals
and nuzzle closer still
Beware the stinging nettles
then come and drink your fill.
I'll dance before your prescence,
my special Honey Bee
Such nectar is the esscence
Of pure serenity.
Within a cloud of yellow
You'll fly back to your hive
To leave me feeling mellow
but very much alive.
A contest entry
- B-WOM ...Best Write of the Month with aboomer, Starz of Heaven by islekine.
1050 points, ended June 5, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is a very pretty write, and the rhyme and meter are really well done. Congrats on a well deserved honorable mention for this piece.
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Bountiful~Wise~Uniquely~Beautiful...
This "A Taste of Honey" came from a dew of sublime imagery.
The fourth stanza could use some revision
In respect and admiration
Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU
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This is a lovely write great wording lovely images thank you for taking the time to enter our contest best wishes always be well.
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Lovely! Your flow is wonderful, as usual from you. Great wording, images - made this a pleasure to read.
nicely done!
thank you for your entry
best wishes in the contest
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Very well penned!
Such a lovely thought...my mom and dad are bee keepers...they have fourteen hives...and we always have fresh honey! I enjoyed this very much, and as usual your poem just flowed...very well penned! (again) Thanks for your support of our contests! I look forward to your entries!
Best wishes in the contest and always! Write on and on...
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Delicious ... and (dare I say it) sensual
A beautiful write that was a pleasure to read.
All the best in the contest
Sue
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Thankyou Sue.a lovely comment
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Excellent...
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Thanks a lot
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ROS!
This poem is wonderful. So full of life and fun and sensuality. The sweetness is just lovely. Yum, what a great write.
You have impressed me yet again hon.
Nicely done.
Love,
jin
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Hello.So lovely to hear from you.I'm glad you liked it, Ros
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Superb
'tis a very fine write, indeed. Imagery; rhythm and rhyme are just fine. Your title reminds me of an old song: "A Taste of Honey"(recorded by various artists). If you haven't heard of it, I'll provide an external link for you.
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Yes I have heard it.Many thanks for commenting and sharing the link
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Yes, and a sweet sauce at that.thankyou for commenting, Ros
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The bee is fortunate indeed to have a blossom so wanting for his attentions. Wonderfully written with imagination and delightful metaphor.
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Hmmm how very saucy.
i liked this poem very much, good luck in the contest. ;D -
mmm..
sweet, sticky, honey..yeah i likes!
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Thankyou.So pleased you do
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Now that's a song I have heard before, but the lyrics were different.
As Jeff said ,Delicious !!
Joe
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Thankyou Joe
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Aaaaahhhhhh
delicious
(as I hope the honey will be!)
Jeff
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Yes Jeff, I feel a drop of mead coming on
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