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Father a living memory

I have seen so many places,
Both the deserts of Africa,
And the ice caps of Alaska,
But neither capitvated me as your site of bural.

 

Because the World must hold,

Their Heros high.

Higher Than the sky.

 

 

Of all the sights to set upon,

The Holy Land was not your mound.

Intrust with me,

No bomb would blow you from the ground.

 

Because My Father was my Hero,

I must Prize his love.

For him i have sold my life to get him up the stairs to God.

 

 

To Italy and Istanbul,

To Turkey,

Transylvania

I searched.

 

But we could never find,

A mount for you to climb.

Though now you rest in sleep.

 

And then to Earths most precious haven,

Greece.

The aqua gaurds,

And turquiose sky.

 

And here i liad you down to rest,

And in this land i seat my self,

To set upon you work.

 

 

Dear reader ask yourself,

Did you ever know a loved one die?

Did you hold then as they left?

Did they give their life for you?

 

For this i answer

Yes

Yes

Yes.

Author notes

To my Father. He took the bullet that should have gone in me.
Do not underestimate the safety of your contry.
A war zone is no place for humans.

And perhaps this is my gratest achievment,
Finding a place for him to rest,
Where no guns and no bombs,
No terror and no fear,
Can group for his hand,
And tear at his heart.

Thank-you daddy.

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  • This is an awesome poem. I love this little tribute for your father. Parents are there to protect. I enjoyed the read!!! Thank you for entering my contest.

  • you capitalized some random words, and "liad", should be laid.

    but it's ok besides that. tell me if you meant to capitalize these words"
    world
    hero
    than
    prize

  • Soulful touching tribute to the love of a father for his child.

    Never underestimate what it means to be a father in this our modern times, for humanity has listed fathers in all the categories, all the diagnostics to be found.

    Fathers are now instantly seen as pedophiles, sex offenders , mass murderers, drug abusers, psycopaths and all the maladies of the word united into one.

    It is a rare gem that you have penned for it is so uncommon for a father to be honored in this here age of reason.

    I like it, I like it so!

    I am sorry for you loss.


  • moaner
    June 3

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    awe, this is lovely. a tribute and an achievement. very well written and plenty of heart in this which in exactly what i wanted. well done on a great poem, good luck in my contest x


  • RpoetR
    June 1

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    Absaloutely touching. I enjoyed reading it and it does make you think and remember those who you have lost. I like the questions and italics. (:

  • Wow.This is a wonderful piece.It makes you think.You are a wonderful poet and I am thankful that you are on so I can read your amazing work

  • Awh, this is really good & sad , i like how you asked the questions at the end..

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