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Balancing Act

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I know what it's like
to balance on the edge of disaster
with one leg to carry the weight
and three dogs snapping at your feet


It’s hard to keep from falling
when everything strikes at lightning speed
and you can’t think past the thunder


But that three-legged deer
stood in the middle of the road
daring me to hit her
and I had to break hard on a downhill slide
just to avoid the splatter

Maybe she was tired

of straddling a three-prong stool
prone to tipping


Cause she had such a look of defiance
at the screech of my intrusion
and I saw the grace in her stride
when she finally turned
and jumped the fence like a ballerina

 

 

 

 

 

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Image: http://anais07.deviantart.com/art/HP-Silver-Doe-62159907

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  • Topnotchsy
    August 20

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    "I know what it's like
    to balance on the edge of disaster
    with one leg to carry the weight
    and three dogs snapping at your feet"

    When I read this I was thinking "wow, does that convey the idea powerfully!!"

    Then the picture of the deer came up and blew me away!!

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    August 9

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    " Balance on the edge of disaster" Great phraseology, six words that create precarious suspense, loved them. This balancing act has three references to three, it may be an underlying inference to balancing mind, body and soul, akin to the holy trinity within the building of the self. Loved the usage of grace and ballerina, the poem ends its journey without ending as the poetess has imbued the beauty of the dance and leaves the momentum to resonate. Kudos.


  • Heart Sutra
    June 19

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    I love the opening line and how you play with words so graciously whimsically. I am not sure anyone else is as good at balancing the wit with the pain as you are. Wonderful work!


  • DogFish silver member
    June 11
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    ...just too good!!


  • Night Hope gold member
    June 5
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    Unlike Junebug, I don't think Zayra should ever be fired. A vividly descriptive piece, Madame Liberryan. I'm glad she was ok...Hope you didn't shake & shiver too much upon your encounter with this beautiful beast, Sweetie. Good luck in the contest, my fearless Friend.




  • Junebug-
    June 4

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    Phenomenal

    “with only one leg to carry the weight
    and three dogs snapping at your feet”

    OMG that was brilliant. When I read just that part I could not stop. It was so funny and I was like “yep been there”!

    “And I could see the grace in her stride
    when she finally turned
    and jumped the fence like a ballerina”

    Wow, the passion behind that was amazing! It struck my heart with a force that was out of this world.
    You are such an amazing poet. English is blessed to have someone like you to place words so exquisitely!

    This poem was one of the best! If you don’t win the competition then the judge needs to be fired from judging duty!

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