on evening wet sand
the impression of myself
reshapes tomorrow
Author notes
Haiku form; japanese traditional
5-7-5 syllables
Zen Poetry
In a list
A contest entry
- Haiku (contest) by Stargaze.
750 points, ended July 10, 51 entries
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450 points, ended August 17, 97 entries
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Seascapes caught my eye.
This puts me in a tranquil place. I thank you. Best wishes to you in this contest. I enjoyed your AHA! moment.
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wow.....i don't know what to say...i guess every praise for this has already been said ^_^....
the ending line...I feel hope..of maybes..and possibilities..and dreams..and wishful thinking..but yearning for a day...another chance.
so much said...so much unsaid..so much depth in this piece...wow...masterpiece..lovely..wonderful haiku
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this is awesome penned to make a thought
of a deep impression to last...
well done deep in thought
Hugs Angel♥
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i really like the flow and how it is not only about the nature but it is also about yourself. very interesting. great job!
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Beautiful imagery and thought.
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thank you for your comments and thoughts
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A good one!
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thank you for commenting and applause
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what a beautiful little haiku to
start my morning off
love, lane
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Such actual facts of truisms encapusulated in a short form burst like a volcano.Life imprinted on the sands of time in constant change with the tides. This dear Poet is sheer mastery over the Haiku form.
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amazing artistry
The depth of thought in this haiku is truly amazing to me.
I am so glad I came over to read this one. Wet sand, impression, reshaping tomorrow....wish I could think this way.
Good luck in this contest my friend.
Jeannette
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great 'ku.
what else can I say?
speechless.
though what that has to do with typing, I don't know.
but good luck in the contest.
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You truly have a gift for the profound.
Your poetry puts me in a tranquil place. The very mention of the sea sends me there. Bravo!
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pretty good and nice description
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nice, short, interesting
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Thought provoking.
I've never really gotten into haikus but I must say that I do enjoy this one. I am now interested in a new style of poetry. I may even try one or two. Thank you for the inspiration.
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thank you Korvair...this form of poetry dates back to 1700's AC...and to delve into this form takes lots of reading and reserch as to what makes a great haiku...there is much information at your fingertips though...google haiku/senryu and you will be on your way..thanks for the wonderful compliment too
Mal
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nice write! for some reason, I feel like wet sand and reshapes go well together. And the message is so true...about how we thnk of ourselves influence our future thoughts and actions. I can just see someone on the beach at night, searching within themselves. Whether the person is proud or not so proud of themselves as an individual, influences what they will do tomorrow - and the story they will attach to it, or how they see it. very good write! thanks for entering! =P
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your thoughts are as profound as the writing is...you have depth along with perception...
thus when the evening tide wipes clean the place we had laid imprinted in sand
renewed is the endless canvas of life
tide upon tide
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