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Death And Cuts And Misery

As  I  watched  you  with  your  knives,

I  would  think  you  were  in  misery  cutting  yourself.

And  when  i  watched  you  do  that,

It  was  killing  me  inside,

When  i  don't  know  what  to  do  to  make  you  stop.

Which  i  think  about  until  your  very  last  day,

You  would  be  cutted  by  your  own  self.

And  be  splattered  and  covered  in  your  own  blood.

Which  that  will  be  the  day  you  will  end,

In  your  own  misery!!!!!!!!!!! Cry

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  • voodoo ink Greeters member
    June 1
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    Welcome To Allpoetry

    Welcome to AllPoetry! If you have any questions, please feel free to ask!
    This is a very interesting poem and sad, too! I would make a small suggestion, change your font color to a darker, more legible lettering. I had to use the "Hide the background" to read it, because it was too bright (the words)...

    Blessed Be,
    Jeremy

  • CHILDinMISERY1
    May 30
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    i love my poemm!!!umm id