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Night at the Crêperie

I remember knowing,
knowing without being told,
not to mention what had happened.
Tragic, shocking, dreadful,
no-one wanted to stir the calming water.

Ten years young and going out for ice cream.  
Innocent as hopscotch, pigtails and bunnies,
my aunt rewarding me for being good that day,
allowing a night-time sugar high for once.

I remember seeing the Crêperie,
hidden amongst the trees,
but they were no longer familiar.
Oh no.
The dark had turned them into monsters,
clawing at the sides of the shop,
engulfing it whole.

'Don't be silly, you can come with us, or go home alone'
My aunt scolds me,
I look back,
am horrified to see the once beautiful grassy field,
a dark and uninviting maze keeping me from home.

We arrive and I feel the trees watching me.
My heart is screaming,
my stomach dropping,
my intestines squirming insanley,
every hair on my body pin-like.

This is not right.

My hands feel clammy,
I feel as though someone is standing over my shoulder,
their eyes burning a hole through my skin.

The waiter brings my ice cream,
he sees I am upset,
jokes with me and pats my back.
He sits with us for a while, telling us tales of his family,
trying to distract me.

He felt it too,
I know he did,
he must've.

We leave the shop and hear gunshots ripping through the air behind us,
confusion strikes as they mix,
mix with the disco and cabaret music,
mix with blood-curdling screams,
mix with my own gasping, sobbing, panting.

Two dead,
terrorist attack.

I remember leaving the morning after,
I had already forgotten his face,
Another innocent, wrong place, wrong time,
it's just how things work,
I know,
I know without being told.






Author notes

A memory of a traumatic childhood experience that I've never been able to talk to with anyone. I wrote this as a way to release it, to have some way to tell my story . This occurred during the summer 9 years ago in Algeria where my family lives.

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  • Dryad Enya
    May 31

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    What you have written has made me cry. Your experiance is tragic, i only wish that we could forget all memories we no loner want. Yet if that could happen i would have memories at all.

    Your skill as a poet be grater than most, whether you are writing from experiance or have gambled everything upon a memory i do not know and nor do i need to know because your master piece is more than satisfactory.

    Welcome to: Till death do us part. I hope you find the group a relise to any pain you may have and remember. I will read any at every poem you wish for me to read.

    Regards:
    Gorecki