In your parents home,
While they sleep.
I will creep into
your room.
Take off my lace
panties.
Lean over you,
Gently wrap them
Around your neck.
Press my body on yours to wake you.
So you get one last look at the room you are in.
I will look into your eyes,
Squeeze, tighter, tighter
Until the life in your eyes
fades in to my smile.
The idea of your mother
crying
mourning
her loss.
Pleases me.
I just wish I was wearing different panties,
I really liked these.
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Nice stuff! Very erotic and dark. Such a good mixture.
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lol luv this poem!!
so sexy and dark
thats awesome!!!!
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Hahaha I love this.
Little bit of everything in it!
I missed reading your writes!!!!
<3
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This is awesome. My favorite line...
Until the life in your eyes
fades in to my smile.
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classic dark romanticism! the fonts adds to the stalker/violent love theme.
one critique,
should, "fades in to my smile,"
read, "fades *into* my smile?"
love the violence and perversity of this one, just DON'T do it k?
peace
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So, by sharing this with us,
have you made us all accessories in a conspiracy to commit murder? Or, at least, panticide. Underneath your very dark hair, you have a very dark brain. Kudoes on your ability to write it out, rather than act it out. Personally, the idea of dying beneath your lacy bits doesn't sound all that intimidating. I mean, if ya gotta go...
Now, if you really want to get even, to intimidate, to cause instantaneous paranoia, mention the possibility of a very hot iron applied to a soundly sleeping scrotum.
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I laughed out loud at the last line. It certainly went in a different direction than I thought. Excellent.
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Damn this is blood thickening poetry...
I was going to say LOL but damn it girl, how could I do such a thing to such a poignant poem.
But hey I at least hope those panties weren't smothered in vagisil or monostat 7 .. LOL
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LOL....
every good thing has a price
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"Until the life in your eyes
fades in to my smile." that was very origninal
This was a very dar and twisted poem.
sexy and evil wow very nice write
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This is uh, different. Haven't had one like this. Very dark, thanks for entering and good luck to you.
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:0 This is weird talk about so sexy revenge that is pretty good. I really really appreciate you entering this it was great I give it a 3/10
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haha...been there! done that!!!
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haha! revenge can be sweet! I love it!
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Yikes- greatly written. It's very simple- very straight forward. Usually I love to have more to it- more in between the lines you left open, but this was nice. Thanks for entering.
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best ever, period.
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oh thanks - well if one has to kick the bucket one might as well go with an erection i suppose, it sure beats getting knocked over or whatever - a good poem.
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i woke up with panties in my mouth one day i and she was gone i thort id eaten the lot but maybe it was an attempt to snuff me out mmm great wrote full if suspense and fire.
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Wow, I really like this
haha I will remember not to tick you off. You did a wonderful job expressing yourself you so so evil Rawr. I love the ending ^_^
my most favorite part. Keep on writing
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ha, well done
"I will look into your eyes,
Squeeze, tighter, tighter
Until the life in your eyes
fades in to my smile."
its between this and the ending as my favorite parts. i was smirking the whole time:-)
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gosh!
this is traumatising. hahahs
so this is what happens when you're pissed eh? 
i shall never try to anger you! 
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I need to keep my pistol closer to hand. Well done. It is very dark--devilishly done.
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deadly...but nicely put
ouch thats some kinky stuff. Not only you displayed the strength of your legs in this poem but but I am thinking you will make the most perfect assassin. you know seeking in windows and crushing them until they did... aahaa.lol
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I love this, and the ending was awesome.
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Ooh.. and you call ME Miss Thang? Holy fuck ,girl lmfao. No sleepovers at YOUR house
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I will have you know it is rude to strangle your guests. So it's safe to sleep over. lol
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Make sure ya keep your panties on then
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fine..fine! all these rules! I almost dont even feel like strangling anyone....oh wait, I still do. lmao.
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Oh hey, I've got a few on a list myself if your mood should ever die away. Just let me know
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i'll do it anyway for you...with my own panties, then White Stone can model them lol
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I would like to volunteer my services to watch over things at you guys sleepover... you know.... in the name of safety.
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good thing.
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Bring your own panties please.
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I'm commando all the way.
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Good.. you'd look silly in a lavendar thong.
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damn how many guys do you know that currently live with their mothers?? I just moved home for the summer and now i am scared
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I like them young lol...
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how young is this victim?
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24...
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Well, I can think of quite a few worse ways to go...
damn, girl...
I would like to hear all about the motivation for this...
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well, when I went to his moms this am, I thought- god i wish it was dark, i would let myself in and kill him. The idea of him not breathing makes me think of a lullabye...its very soothing.
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He doesn't deserve the honor of getting strangled by your panties... sounds kinky...
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