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Prove them wrong

Judging eyes, and hypocrites,

They think they know it all.

They can criticize the life we live,

But They will never see us fall.

 

Step up, Step up, sing your fucking song.

Ignore their insults, fuck what they say.
Step up, Step up, prove them wrong.
Show them up, look their way.
Step up, Step up, Sing your song.

Step up, step up, prove them wrong.  

 

Their opinions, they don't matter.

So pathetic, they think their words can destroy us.

It's pointless, nothing but senseless chatter.

Sound's more like their just fucking jealous.

 

Step up, Step up, sing your fucking song.
Ignore their insults, fuck what they say.

Step up, Step up, prove them wrong.
Show them up, look their way.
Step up, Step up, Sing your song.

Step up, step up, prove them wrong.  

 

Fuck their words, they don't mean shit.

On our goals, we wont quit, we will never give in.

Prove them wrong, We'll never let them win.

We'll sing this song, again and again.

Author notes

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*Survey* For: forever imaginary

About You


AP Name: A m y 1 1 4


Nickname: Amy or Mandy


Age: 17 will be 18 July 8th


Gender: Female


Appearance: In Picture

Personailty: hard to describe..
I'm nice unless you really piss me off
Then I'm probably the biggest bitch ever
but I don't get mad easy unless it's at my boyfriend

Position You Want In My Family: Sister

An Interesting Fact About You: All of my lyrics are true.. things that really happened and thoughts so I don't join contest unless I can relate to the prompts

Favorites

Favorite Color: Blue

Favorite Saying: "live and never regret forgive but never forget"
and "Everything happens for a reason"

Favorite Piece of Clothing: umm I have a few.. My AC/DC hoodie Slipknot Hoodie
Born to party T shirt and my
Frunk as duck T shirt ( Drunk as fuck lol)

Favorite Author: (any kind of author, poetry, story, etc.) hmm I don't really know this one can it be lyricist? that would be Corey Taylor from slipknot

Favorite Band: Slipknot and evanescence

Favorite Song: Everything ends by slipknot and My immortal by Evanescence

About Your Poetry

Usual Genres: hard to say I write what ever is happening at the times so it changes alot

Usual Form: I write lyrics only (Rhyme)

Usual Length: 20-50 lines (since they are lyrics)

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Comments

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  • nobodys-girl
    June 29

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    wow! this is so full of a powerful, angry feeling. i love it! thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck!


  • Night Terrors
    June 25

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    I think you may be useing fuck to much it makes you sound unitelligent if overused nice song though what kinda music would this be to? I would give this a 3/10 thanks for enterin


  • Antebellum
    June 24

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    "Fuck their words, they don't mean shit.

    On our goals, we wont quit, we will never give in.

    Prove them wrong, We'll never let them win.

    We'll sing this song, again and again"


    amazing! I love your lyrics.
    there great. Good luck.


  • Miss Macabre
    June 20

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    Fuck yea! Love it, has a very angry fuck you you aren't as hardcore as you think tone to it. Good luck to you!


  • aeolia
    June 16

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    I can definitely see this as an alternative-type song. I don't listen to music like that, but I might make an exception were this a song; it sounds angrily uplifting.

    Your capitalisation was a little wonky; you capitalised "step," "they," and "we'll" in some places where they were not the first word of a sentence. You might want to go back and fix them.

    "On our goals, we wont quit" -- the invertedness of the phrase felt awkward, especially for a contemporary song.

    "Sound's more like their just fucking jealous" -- should be "sounds" and "they're," respectively.

    Thanks for the entry!

    -endymion


  • FlipperSwitch
    June 8

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    Great! Usually I don't prefer cursing but you pulled it off. The repetition was nicely managed as well. Thank you for entering.


  • etoile
    June 8

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    I asked for prose/freeverse only, so I will have to DQ this poem. thanks for entering, they were great lyrics.

  • Ahki97
    June 1
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    i like this one i like the picture 2


  • KelsiEvermore
    May 31

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    I love your sayings.
    OME! I love Evanescence!!! I don't listen to Slipknot. What's your favorite song by them?

    My favorite part of your poem:
    Judging eyes, and hypocrites,
    They think they know it all.
    They can criticize the life we live,
    But They will never see us fall.
    I like the repetition. I can relate to these lyrics.
    Thanks for entring, and good luck!


  • sideways hourglass
    May 30

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    As I was reading this, it screamed "Lily Allen" - lol. Reminded me of her song "Fuck you".
    I enjoyed this.


  • StarEyes
    May 30

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    you know, I love this! The rhyme, the thoughts behind it, everything! I love it! every word of it!

    Best of luck in this contest!

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