The voices in my head
Keep telling me of one of one thing.
They say it's better than this.;
They say it's better than anything.
The voices in my head
Keep telling me of one thing.
They say it will bring joy.
They say it will bring peace.
The voices in my head
Keep telling me of one thing.
They say it's a quick way.
They say it's called suicide.
I could use some good critizism on my poems, tell me what oyu disliked or liked about them. anything would help.
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Very Impressive
I feel the pain, and i know those voices too well, they have been in my head lately as well. I struggle on even when darkness covers my world and hope the brighter day comes. I hope your life is ok and the poem is not what you feel. I am alive b/c of my friends and they keep me surviving and I hope you can survive this wrecked time as well.
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I enjoyed this poem alot, it had an amazing structure
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that poems really good, if you actually feel this way you can always message me to talk
id just like to point out in the second line youve written "of one of one"
and in the third line im not sure you need the "." before the ";"
but other than that... well done!
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I feel da same way sumtimes n just like ur there for me Im always here fo you sis love ya
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