seedlings
on a curtail breeze
dandelions- for my neighbors
In a list
A contest entry
- Kevin's Haiku Contest! Win a 1 month silver membership by Kevin.
900 points, ended June 24, 79 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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curtail means to shorten, so doesnt seem to really fit. i like the image of sending the weeds over to your neighbors, but his is mostly only one line...tell a story and expand it some?
the word 'neighbor' is unfortunately such a nasty awkward western word, hmm.
seeds in the air
my wild grasses spread
in the four directions -
In these brief words we see the action affecting the present and determining the future. More than that we see the oblique humor which is part of the tradition of the genre. The poem is serious but does not take itself seriously which makes it all the more appealing.
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In the category of postmodern, free-form haikus,
this is superb!!
Damn funny, too!
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Very nice. Dandelions are back!
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Very cute! Spread the loooove~! (I happen to love dandelions.)
Best wishes in the contest! I'm sure you'll do well. ^___^
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lol cute, clever, and beautiful
great job here.
Delila
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smiles. I like it. I like it a lot.
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Such a sweet little haiku
....I just can't write them...so I'll leave it up to the masters....
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Im just short winded LOL
is all...
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I have to hand it to you. I could never write a Haiku. Good luck in the contest.
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Zayra... if you did write them
they'd be awesome
I just know it!
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how is that a ku...2 5 8?
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it's a modern or contemporary haiku hun...and it's under 17 syllables
traditional is 5-7-5
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its only 15 though
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I have some 3-5-3
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Grrr....have you been watching my neighbor's yard......buy some weed killer I say under my breath!
Excellent KU'
Bear -
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mr perfect lawn next door, now has a front lawn- just like mine LOL
and everyone else on the street for that matter
am I bad or what?
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