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Lies

'Yeah.' Blade to skin
'Sure.' Pushed more in
'Of course.' Straight across
'Goodbye.' Lifted off

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Lies............  Blade to skin
Hatred........  Pushed more in
Pain...........  Straight across
Goodbyes....  Lifted off

Author notes

This actually happened. I was reading a e-mail, that was my boyfriend breaking up with me, he basically explained that he had lied to me, so I grabbed a blade, and, well cut.

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  • brokenxxangel
    June 25
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    I like the first one better. And, for the record, Alex's a total douchebag for doing that!!


  • Fallen-Thumper
    May 29

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    I'm sorry for what happened and i've been in that position (dumped by text though). I really liked it as it holds the truth and the emotion. Really well written