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I Remember a Place

I remember a place,
where the world was new
where everything still grew
where everything was in balance.

I remember a place,
where the leafs change and fall
where you rake them up
and then jump into the pile.

I remember a place,
where the pollen is ever present
where it is hard to breath in the Spring
where pollen gets on everything.

I remember a place,
where the flowers bloom
where the birds sing
where the water was still safe to drink.

I remember a place,
where the sun sets over rolling hills of green
where I took a girl and laid down under the willow
where each tree had a scent.

I remember a place,
where you could run and hide
where you could be alone
where you could be together.

I remember a place,
where I loved to go and look
where there was always something new
where there was always a place to discover.

I remember a place,
that is no longer there
that was ravaged for parts
that lost its splendor.

I remember a place,
that is now a wasteland
that is now barren
that is now void of life.

I remember a place,
where only bare hills remain
where the dust always blows
where the sun still mourns

I remember a place,
where all the beauty left
where all the joy was crushed
where all the life was wasted

I know a place,
that was used
that was abused
that was neglected.

I know a place,
where all that remains... is silence
where the cry of all life can be heard
where the only story is of loss.

I know a place,
created by our greed
created by our lust
created by our need

I know a place,
where all that was lost
is gone
now and forever.

Author notes

Came to me on my way home from work one night. Please never forget that we only have ONE Earth, if we destroy it there will be nothing left.

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Comments

  • I like the imagery of this piece. To be honest the repetition is not really working for me. Too many "where" in there but overall I liked the sentiments.


  • Knight70 silver member
    June 13

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    powerful message...

    The repetition works well for a piece like this. I couldn't agree with this more. Just like you said, "We have only ONE earth." I wish you the best with your book of poetry, by the way.

    Don

  • so sad

    This poem is a lesson to all. It's simple and beautiful and true. Very nice work.