“Lucky” was the word you used.
I was “Lucky” for every touch,
For every time you looked my way.
You were teasing…but quite sincere
You expected me to be grateful,
And, like the obedient pet, I was.
I would always run at your call,
Every beating felt deserved.
I would do anything for one golden word,
The tiniest gesture of love
Meant all the world to me.
But now I see they were never real.
So let me tell you, I AM grateful!
Grateful for every lie,
Every wound, and every barb.
Because every underhanded trick exposed the REAL you.
Now I am free to walk the world,
With eyes open, thanks to you.
And the word I use is “Grateful”
As you die alone.
Author notes
I used option six, the title "Grateful". This is very loosely based on something true.
A contest entry
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Now I am free to walk the world,
With eyes open, thanks to you.
And the word I use is “Grateful”
As you die alone.
oohhh...nasty! I can really feel the bitterness here. Job well done!!I'm glad that you took this bad experience and turned it into a positive thing. I loooove the last stanza. Loved the flow here, except the last line in the fourth stanza, Because every underhanded trick exposed the REAL you." was a bit off. But it's no biggie.
I liked your interpretation of the title It's so much fun seeing how different your poems are from what I had in mind for a particular title.
Thanks for the entry!!
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