The dead thoughts that claw me,
devilish demons who won't let me be.
I pray but I harvest no fruit,
none but confusion and questions,
is this me, is it my fault?
Look and see these ghosts inside me.
Do I deserve such hell in my being?
They talk of cutting, hurt and harming,
other acts unholy and blasphemy.
To my heart friends say be accepting,
but I feel too guilty.
God says just think pure thoughts,
I've tried but I can not.
Is this a disorder or moral failure?
I try but they won't leave,
so I still hate Steve.
It's in this soul, it's not visible.
I hide, playing at normal,
wishing it were true,
I can't be who I want to.
Am I Angel, or Devil?
Is it who I fail to be or OCD.
Author notes
This is a poem about how my OCD makes me feel.
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Wow. This is incredibly personal and introspective. You did a wonderful job pouring emotions into this.
Write on.
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It's a good poem, but the color draws away from the poem from it, the flow is wonderful, i can feel a powerful voice behind the poem itself, and it just leaves me speachless
5/5 for the poem, and 2/5 for the coloring. 5/5 for the message. And a 5/5 for the picture that the poem gives
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very intriguing piece, Steve. I find myself feeling this way quite often.
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Very relatible.
stunningwrite.
"It's in this soul, it's not visible.
I hide, playing at normal,
wishing it were true,
I can't be who I want to."
these lines are amazing.
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we all get those nasty thoughts of someone every once in awhile, but that doesn't make any of us a bad person...the only time we are bad/evil is when we act on these thoughts...it's okay to not like someone as long as we don't act cruelly against anyone.
i think you did a wonderful job on this write...it was open and honest with emotion and thats great work! being normal is very highly overrated (LOL)!!! ;0)
your poem reminds me of a quote from a tv series: "we are all born of both natures good and evil. it's the side that we nurture that defines who we are." again, this is a very good write...excellent job, poet! keep writting!
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really good. a hard topic to write about without sounding ridiculous but you naled it! lol. i really like this poem it is beautifully written.
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You are my angel. The guilt you feel is OCD trying to worm itself into your beautiful mind. Be at peace Stevie. You are always so aware of trying to do the right thing. Because of this, you will be fine. Trust me and be kind to yourself.
I love you my sweet friend.
Mariana
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good job
i really like it =)
i like the way it flouts smootly
it helps me understand what you are living though
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