You expelled me from your heart,
Leaving me with nothing.
I felt myself fall into a dark abyss,
My soul turned to black.
My wings ripped out of my back,
You have hurt me too much.
Someday I will come back,
And you will regret what you did.
Author notes
K u n o i c h i, Sister
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I like the subject matter, in this short poem. It is a beautiful piece. Good luck in the contest. Take care and have a great day.
Sandi -
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Interesting piece. It's dark and full of remorse. I like It. It's true that sometimes we'll feel that way sometimes. We have to move though. Good luck and keep writing -
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It's good but....sadly you didn't read my rulez, sorry it's not gonna count.
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I like line 3. Creative use of the abyss. Good luck and thanks for entering my contest.
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I'm definitely in love with this poem. It didn't make me cry, no, but it was short and sad and precise. If no one makes me cry, we know who's winning, haha.
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ahhh. no more sad poems. theyre no longer allowed.
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It was good. Very well written...but it is not exactly what I am looking for. Thank you for the entry and the wonderful poem.
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<3 (not ballsack)
It's great, you're a good wrier Cheyenne.
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