I look everywhere around me,
You are nowhere to be found.
Why did you leave me,
Why did you go into the ground.
Micheal, I still love you,
You are still my baby brother,
You'll be so glad to know,
The other day I talked to your mother.
She invited me to come and visit you,
It's on the day you died.
I was so happy Micheal,
I just broke down and cried.
I'm gonna come and see you bubby,
For the first time in three years.
I'll try not to cry Micheal,
I'll try to fight back my tears.
I know you hated to see me cry,
So I'm gonna bite back and be strong.
I haven't seen you in a while bubby,
It's been so very long.
I'm gonna come and see you,
And tell you what's been going on.
Just wait a little bit longer Micheal...
I'll be there at dawn.
I could use some good critizism on my poems, tell me what oyu disliked or liked about them. anything would help.
Comments
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Aw.
this is sad...
but very powerful. i liked the words and the emotion...very good poem 
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its really good dont change a thing
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so sad.
I can somewhat relate to this...as well as many many others can relate.
"I'll try to fight back my tears.
I know you hated to see me cry,
So I'm gonna bite back and be strong.
I haven't seen you in a while bubby,
It's been so very long."
Such powerful lines.
wonderfully written
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