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The Kiss

I Stare Into Her Eyes, She Stares Back Into Mine,
It's Like We're Hypnotised, By Our Love,
Our Hands Join,
She Stares Deeper, And So Do I,
Deeper And Deeper, Hypnotised By Our Passion,
My Hand Slides Gently Round Her Waist,
Her Hand Slips Round My Neck,
Still Deeply We Stare,
I Lean Towards Her, She Leans Torwards Me,
Closer And Closer, Our Passionate Love, A Flame Burning So Bright,
Closer And Closer Still, Soon, So So Soon, So Close,
She Tilts Her Head, I Tilt Mine, Still Leaning Towards Each Other,
I Close My Eyes, And This Moment Begins,
Our Lips Purge, True Loves True Kiss, A Beauty To Behold, A Thing So Divine,
Passion Enraged, I Hold Her Tighter, She Holds Me Closer,
Our Lips Dancing On A Sea Flames, Passionate Flames,
A Love So Unbreakable, A Kiss So Divine,
Her Hand Slips From My Neck To My Waist, My Hand Slips Lower,
Passion Enthrals Us,
Her Sweet Lips, I Taste On Mine, And Deeper The Kiss Still Goes,
Our Fiery Passion, Enough To Set The World On Fire,
And The Kiss Starts Too Slowly Fade, The Passion Still Rages,
Our Lips Break Away, Our Eyes Open, We Stare Again, So Deeply In Love,
We Hold Each Other, My Hand Now Around Her Waist Again,
And Again We Lean, The Kiss, Never Ends...

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  • tearrsofthemoon
    July 28

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    how intersting this is. i like the tale of the kiss. it is sopassionate and beautiful, you have written this so well. thank you for sharing and best of luck in my contest.


  • Fallen Under Light
    July 16

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    I pictured all of this and after I was done reading my only thoughts were
    "This kid is 15 and his writing is brilliant, imagine how great he'll be in 10 years."

    Wonderful job!


  • SkitzoSkittlez
    July 15

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    WOW!!

    i love how you give every detail of the kiss.. you deffinetly made me feel y'alls love.. the imagery is a great, i can just picture how you felt.. great poem!!!!
    thanks for entering and good luck! <3


  • Antebellum
    July 14
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    'Closer And Closer, Our Passionate Love, A Flame Burning So Bright,
    Closer And Closer Still, Soon, So So Soon, So Close,
    She Tilts Her Head, I Tilt Mine, Still Leaning Towards Each Other,'


    I love this part!
    the wording here is beautiful. thanks so much for entering.
    good luck.


  • Antebellum
    July 14
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    'Closer And Closer, Our Passionate Love, A Flame Burning So Bright,
    Closer And Closer Still, Soon, So So Soon, So Close,
    She Tilts Her Head, I Tilt Mine, Still Leaning Towards Each Other,'


    I love this part!
    the wording here is beautiful. thanks so much for entering.
    good luck.


  • knife-life-gurl-emo
    July 14
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    good that was the sweetest poem ive ever from a boy


  • Diminished Capacity gold member
    July 13

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    This is absolutely beautiful. The all caps did bother me some, but it didn't take away from the poem. I loved every bit of it, thank you so much for entering.

  • Writing0Freedom
    July 11

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    THe capitalization was confusing, and this isn't really what I was looking for. Please read my favs or my work, before you decide to re enter.
    Sorry


  • cookie-monster
    July 9
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    Hypnotised Round True loves and the kiss starts too
    Just a few errors, but this was very sweet ^-^ It kinda annoyed me how every word was capitalized. But still, it was great

    Thanks for entering


  • black-phenoqu
    July 4

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    only one question...

    why was every word capitalized? is than soposed to mean something? other than that, all questions were answered in this well written poem. you really dissected this kiss,i bet it will be em-blazed in your mind forever!


    • SuicidalBlackshadow
      July 4
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      The answer to your question is that I have a habit of capitalizing every word when I write poetry... It seems to be a very bad habit... I hope I don't get DQ'ed for this...

  • ilyxforever
    June 7
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    OMGsh.!
    I am in love with this poe


  • Fallen-Thumper gold member
    June 7

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    Deeper And Deeper, Hypnotised By Our Passion <--- amazing words used and i really loved this line.
    Our Fiery Passion, Enough To Set The World On Fire <--- loved this line alot.
    amazing poem


  • Indigo.Wishes x
    May 28
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    There are no words in my vocabulary to describe this . . . Except OMGsh!

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