What is this life if full of care?
we spin and weave, our hair turn grey.
We have no time to stand and stare.
No time to sit and warm a chair,
there's meals to cook and bills to pay.
What is this life if full of care?
When rains of April wet the air,
we rush to shop a china tray.
We have no time to stand and stare.
A kiss ? A chat ? No, no, we swear,
our hollow eyes to screens astray.
What is this life if full of care?
We leave our tender child to share
his smiles with maids. Is it okay,
we have no time to stand and stare ?
Perhaps, some day we try to blare
a hello, now we slave away.
What is this life if full of care,
we have no time to stand and stare.
April 09
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thats a thoughtful villanelle...good luck
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Thanks. I appreciate your comments
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I love the line "What is life full of care?". Great job. -
Villanelle
A Villanelle is a nineteen-line poem consisting of a very specific rhyming scheme:
aba aba aba aba aba abaa.
The first and the third lines in the first stanza are repeated in alternating order throughout the
poem, and appear together in the last couplet (last two lines).
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Thanks for the comments and the HM.
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Very good. A clever reworking of the original.
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