It corrupts
It hates
It consumes
Lives lost
destinies forgotten
dreams dissipated
The evil
In humanity
annihilates and destroys
Countless lives lost
the destinies forgotten
the dreams not realized.
Author notes
I wrote to go with my English Final Exam I took this morning.
What do you think? If I have an uncapitalized "i" please tell me=]
Comments
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I agree, evil just eats away at us and makes us all become something were not. Very good I love it.
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I like this Ryan. But then again i tend to like dark poems but seriously nice job particularly something that was i am guessing you winged.
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Nice one!
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Good
I liked this poem. The rhythm is the same, but that doesn't mean a poem packs a punch. THis poem means true to me, knowing in our lives humanity grows more evil as the futre progresses. Humans will always hate, and i think you poem brings that message across.
I also like how you cut each line short. Really makes you sound as if you're angry. And the short vowels makes the poem sound ugly (not saying that's a bad thing; in here it's good.), bringing either sorrow or anger in humanity's evil. Overall: like it.
I liked the last stanza. It really creeped me out, but at the same time it brought out your message.
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