Beyond any rhyme or reasoning
Is this puritanical emotion
Embalmed in the guileless aura
Of your innocent love
A love that soothes my wounds
Ensheathing me protectively
In the garment of your love
A love that heals the ache
Exempting me from the bondage,
That enslaved my fallible being
A love that reassures my soul
Enshrining my dreams,
Building the church of love
The sins of the past had held me captive
Enslaving me in the bondage of fear
Every day was a battle with my own self
Encountering the ghosts of the yesterday
My soul had emaciated into a cadaver
Enswathed in the pall of death
Till your love tip toed into my life
Giving me a reason to believe
You infused life in me
Helping me overcome my fears
You gave me eyes to see
Wiping away the crimsoned tears
You gave me legs when I was unable to walk
Lending me your voice when I could not talk
You feathered me with the wings of freedom
Making me wiser gracing me with wisdom
You adorned me in the garment of purity
Bejewelling me with the tiara of love
And when I found you I had realized
That you were someone
I had waited for all my life
My Husband,best friend,my ennobled knight...
20th "May" 2009
© 2006-2009 Rinzu Susan Rajan
Author notes
r i n z u r a j a n
A contest entry
- A Contest For Love(rs) by PerfectImperfection.
900 points, ended June 16, 24 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I'm So In Love With You. by Poetryintheblood.
900 points, ended November 1, 23 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything at all - Points will go up by AngelicDreams.
700 points, ended November 24, 68 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Most beautifully stated piece filled with a tenderness for your love, thank you for entering and good luck, Josie
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So very nice
A sweet, loving gentle piece that was a joy to read
Thank you for sharing and being part of this contest -
love can be so sweet
thank you for entering -
thanks for the entry!
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Hi there--
This was a very sweet poem. I can tell you must love him so much. I think the only thing I would recommend is that you insert more punctuation. Without it, the flow of the poem kind of suffers. But otherwise this was a great poem. Good luck
in the contest!
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Wow! That was so pretty and beautiful. I loved that write.
Favorite lines: Every day was a battle with my own self
Encountering the ghosts of the yesterday
My soul had emaciated into a cadaver
Enswathed in the pall of death
and.. You gave me legs when I was unable to walk
Lending me your voice when I could not talk
Those lines were strong.
Overall grade: 8/10
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This is really beautiful
The tones and shades of love unfurls its blanket once unwrapped
Thank you for sharing your beauty of words
best wishes
Julie
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Beautiful.
thanks for sharing.
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Alot of contests! I hope you win! I did love the commitment showed to your partner/other half/life partner.
It's always nice to see.
Thank you for entering.
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Holy wow you've entered this in alot of contests. I find, that this poem could use some more imagery. Show us, don't tell us. The use of metaphors could do nicely with this. You had some good ideas but I think you could elaborate on it. Good job, and good luck in the contest.
Josh
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I feel like I've read this before, even though I'm positive I haven't. My favourite part:
"You gave me legs when I was unable to walk
Lending me your voice when I could not talk"
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This is truly beautiful. The emotions are well penned, and framed with such sincerity of heart. Nicely done indeed. Thank you for your entry!
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This was very good. Good luck and thank you for entering my contest.
~Kayla
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This is a beautiful, touching write that really tugged on my heartstrings. Thankyou so much for entering this piece, and I wish you the best of luck in the contest!
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Very beautiful! I enjoyed your use of vocab as well as the form- however I am a fan of punctuation when needed.
I did crack an awing smile, so well done Thank you for entering.
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Good luck and thanks for entering my contest.
-heva
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I thought it was good, you used some descriptive language!
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Wow...this was just...beautiful. absolutely stunning. i could feel the emotions in your words as I read this. BRAVO!! an amazingly phenomenal write! keep up the good work! thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!
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beautiful poem, with exquisite word choice. thank you so much for following my rules also. thank you very much for entering. good luck
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Very nice
This is great for one that can relate to what is said. Don't forget to put "DeadUntilDark" in your authors notes. I wouldn't want this to not be in the contest! Good luck, The Shaker -
This is well put, lovely indee
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