We met the first day
of our freshman year in high school
We had every class together
We sat next to each other in every class
We talked about an assignment
And you gave butterflies in my stomach
You always looked at me and smiled
When you thought I wasn't looking
A month had passed
We were always together
You aked me out
How could I not say yes
We together throughout
Our high school years
We were so in love
We talked about anything and everything
We had our whole future planned
We had planned the wedding, house , and kids
We were even goin to the same college
But in our sernior year everything changed
You signed up for the army
You daid that you wanted to make a difference
That you wanted to fight for our country
I didn't want you to go
We graduated from high school
And a week later you were going to leave
I cried , begged, and pleaded for you not to go
But you had your mind made up and turned to me and said
Baby I love you I'm not going to die over there I'm comming back home to you I promise
We always talked
Through phone calls and letters
I always cried when it was time to end our conversations
I always prayed every night for your safety
You didn't call for two days
I knew something was wrong
I called your mom
She said that they called and said
There was an incident and that you were gone
That was the worst news ever
I dropped the phone I was crying and screaming
My whole future with you gone
My whole world crushed
I cried for days
No one could help me
A part of me died when you died
I couldn't eat or sleep
All I could do is cry
My brave soilder
They took your life
Only 22 years old
How dare they
They stole you from us
They stole you from me
I feel so incomplete
I'm trying to go on
But I simply just can't
I want to be with you
But I knw that you would want me
To live a long and happy life
But without you
There is no happines
There is no light in this dark world
There is no reason for being
May you rest now my fallen soilder. May your life never be forgotten. You will always be with me . I love you today, tomorrow , and always. Reat now my sweet angel
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i like the poem, the meaning, but what is distracting is the that there are some typos.
Soilder should be soldier, with that typo in the title will distract some people from reading it and giving this write the chance it deserves.
Then there are a couple of others also,
third stanza, it should say asked, but you forgot the letter "s" so its says aked.
sixth stanza, wrote "daid", but it should be said.
Other than the spelling errors, this is a gut wrenching write.
It is sad that it even had to be written, cause of wars, you let the reader feel your pain.
Well done.
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Wow, I don't know if I have the words to really say about this. It was amazing, and like everyone else, I was nearly in tears as well. I pray that God heals your heart. Other than a few typos, the write was perfect. There's no denying the emotion you feel, even though I'm sure there's more than this write could even show. Well done.
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WOW
So much love and emotion in this write. You have poured your soul out and we can feel the sadness. You have given this brave young man a tribute that is well deserved
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The poem is amazing. It's vivid and full of love. I'm so sorry for the loss. Your boyfriend died with honor, and that's something to be very proud of him for.
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wow, thats was fairly freakin amazing. i too had tears in my eyes, it was almost as if i could feel your pain, although i know i couldnt even dream of what youre going through. but the way you write is quite empathetic and i would assume writing this would have been very hard for you. very beautiful
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Holy $hit. This was amazing. there was only one error, and that was a simple typo. insead of daid it should be said. other than that, great write, it literally had me with tears in my eyes. I would never know the pain of losing one so close that I still loved, but you made it so evident in this write. Amazing job.
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