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The Sugar Pie

It was sitting there, all by itself,
Sitting there, right on the shelf,
Freshly baked and fiery warm,
Lur'ing even the local bee swarm,
Little did the devourers know,
There was something there, behind the show,
For as the eater took a bite,
His dainty wife screamed out in fright,
His face turned blue, his hands turned black,
Frothing with red life, he dropped like a sack,
His wife was next, she took not long,
She choked again, something was wrong,
Benath the Pie's steamy appeal,
It's maker hath dropped with obvious zeal,
A splash of venom, green as sea,
Waiting for hunger, blissfully,
Whereupon a lucky chance became,
A man and wife did exclaim,
They set right in to the juicy treat,
Berries tender and sickly sweet,
Only as they began to enjoy,
The secret within did deploy,
They never again let out a sigh,
Upon eating that sweet Sugar Pie.

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  • emma...
    September 7
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    hey. the contest is closing in a few hours, and since you never put in the username/link, i'm going to have to DQ you. thank you for entering anyways :]


  • emma...
    August 29

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    Please put your user name spaced out in the author's notes. Also, put up the link to your other entry in my contest. Fix that as soon as possible or else I can't judge you and I will DQ.
    Thanks for entering; good luck


  • Kathraina silver member
    July 20

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    MMMMM pie! haha
    Very good job with this piece, fantastic imagery and flow throughout.
    Bravo


    ♥ kate


  • FlipperSwitch
    June 3
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    Nice, I've never read a twisted poem concerning pie


  • PurpleSky
    June 2

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    your rhyme and flow were awsome and well done however for the poem after the wife saw what happened to her husband why in the world did she decide to try it too lol. silly woman!
    huggles
    Lena


  • MoonStarRaven
    June 2

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    This was a very interesting a different poem. It was well written and had a really nice flow to it. Thank you so much for entering my contest, best wishes and good luck.

  • Blackonyxfire
    May 28
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    LOL So my dear friend, this is how you waste your stupy peroid id terahl aldir

  • Unholy Sinner
    May 27

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    Great job! I was interested the whole time, I love how such a sweet pie could have such a poisonous taste!


  • shelbymarie
    May 27
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    Love your take on the prompt. It was a great read. Thanks for entering.

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