Dear Carly Age Seven:
There are passing glimpses I've held inside my cage,
a light so dim like watered down rum-- and there she is;
mama's in the manger begging to be held
sweat builds at the back of your throat as you choke,
and your back breaks.
Well I wish I spoke words as sweet as candy
so I could sprinkle your world with sweet salvation--
that I do not is not blank in my heart,
for it is filled to the brim with warmth for you;
and I bleed for you
moons filled up with smoke for her...
In the corner of a room, I've folded strength [I pray you've found it]
Dear Christine:
There are brittle bones littered on these floors,
and I have carved stories in these walls to keep from breaking;
chalk ground up to patch the sediments to your teeth--
we are the oblivion.
I've wondered if the stardust fell around me to mock me
or if it was missing me; miles fell off my calendar and it was you
it is always you.
And I've grown now to realize what the holes inside me symbolize,
but I don't care anymore, I promise.
I have counted down to the last profession of love...
Prove me wrong.
Dear Carly:
I can hold you in my hands as I have held glass angels on a shelf,
and just as strong you sing me to sleep--
if no one else for ages keeps you, I will never let you go;
let all the celestial wonders of this world crumble up
and die for you.
You are a world inside of yourself, like lightning in the distance
calls your name--
O Come to me,
Let me take you Home
where you will never find her
O Come to me,
I will give you strength
where you will never have strength
Alas, I am still on Earth;
and I will search these dusty plains for Mother's coo
until I've exhausted every corner--
I will stay here, insuperably.
With Love, With Carelessness, With Respect,
Myself.
A contest entry
- the alveolus rounds; round one by winterbound..
700 points, ended October 21, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Lovely
It's great, I love the way you portray the letter, its so beautiful and it flows and just wraps around so nicely. -
Letters:
--Title - 1/5
--Clarity - 3/5
--Poetic tone 2.5/5
--Poetic devices -10.5/20
--Emotion: 7/10
--Structure/Balance: 9/10
--Cohesion: 9/15
--Impact: 5/10
--Syntax: 4.5/10
--Diction: 6/10
--Rules followed 6/6
--Brownie points:0/4
TOTAL: 63
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