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Band Of Gold

 

 

 

He stood alone, surveyed the room; cold shadows lit the wall,
the sun had set, the moon was on the rise,
he shuffled to the kitchen down a long and dreary hall,
a stream of bitter tears stung tired eyes.

The day progressed quite smoothly; now the family had left,
all sympathy and love wrapped in the cards,
the passing of his Molly had left Albert quite bereft
his heart was shattered in a million shards.

He poured himself a whisky and he settled with a glass
remembering old times they’d left behind,
losing track of timing, many hours came to pass
and Molly was the one thing on his mind.

Subconsciously he fiddled with a shiny band of gold,
remembering the one he gave to her,
no longer felt the warmth of love, his heart was dead and cold,
the visions in his mind began to blur.

They found him in the morning with a smile upon his face,
his wedding ring was clasped within his hand,
he’d gone to be with Molly, they no longer run the race
togetherness is all they'd ever planned.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Daizee silver member
    June 2
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    This made me swallow the lump in my throat


  • Dalaney gold member
    May 28

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    pass the kleenex...no, seriously...this has

    everything needed to make me cry like a baby.

    Oh, what an ending! bravo, my friend!

     

    love, lane

    • Many thanks Lane, I really appreciate you stopping by and reading.

      Love
      Sue

  • So very very pleased to see gold here. Congratulations on your award. This is such a moving piece. ~Pamela

    • Many thanks Pam both for the congratulations and the comment, I'm so glad you enjoyed it.

      Sue

  • Beautiful sentiment and treasured thoughts. A pleasure to read and enjoy. ~Pamela


  • moonbumps silver member
    May 27

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    You always excel at this kind of scenario-well done babes-
    xxx Hilly


  • Legend silver member
    May 27

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    A piece that i have to say brought a lump to my throat. Some poems can do that without warning Excellent a real pleasure in reading this The given title was expressed with this I guess i knew when i gave it that something like this would appear, So pleased i was proved right

    • Thank you for the comment and the trophy, I'm so glad you enjoyed this one.

      Sue
      x

  • Bad Bill
    May 27

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    A well-written (and very sad) love poem, and an excellent take on the prompt.

    Good one,
    Bill

  • The Queen is back!!!!

    Happy sadness at it's very best.

    Superb




    Jeff

  • Bob Fox
    May 26

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    Sue

    You know I have seen this happen a few times in my life. I guess there can be no truer love. thanks for the reminder that love still exist. Excellent piece.

    • Many thanks Bob, love will always exist, you just have to know where to look for it.

      Sue
      x

  • Great poem for the prompt! I love it! Best of luck in the contest!

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