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Signs of Rain


We didn't notice it at first,
when seasons got so dry,
the wells had water for our thirst,
we all were getting by.
It rained still, in infrequent bursts
and torrents from the sky,
before the drought of seven years
in which we learned to save our tears.

The winters brought their stinging snows,
but not their gentle drifts,
the roaring springs made burbling flows,
the summers held their gifts.
The fall was only how it goes,
as we made further shifts,
adapting to the changing climes,
and looking back on better times.

Today we look for signs of rain
in darker shades of gray,
and hope the clouds will mount again
as they did yesterday.
When showers come across the plain
and moisten ready clay,
the work and love we give the lands
deliver bounty to our hands.

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  • catz Moderators member
    October 10

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    A poem worthy of timeless acreditation, Margaret. I love reading your beautifully executed poetry with it's pleasant flow, even meter and lovely imagery.
    This poem rminds me that there's always a brighter side to gloom. Sometimes we just have to look a little deeper.
    Congratulations on the well deserved trophy


    Dee


  • klassy lassy
    May 28

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    Margaret, you are truly a very accomplished poet. Your rhyme is so easy to read and the meter is flawless. It all just rolls off the tongue so fluently.

    I like the gentle feel of these thoughts, for work accomplished, the challenges, and that work still awaits us to make the future abundant--in capable hands. And heart is capable, too.

    The scultping continues, despite the season of rain.


  • myrataal silver member
    May 28

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    Timeless ... thoughtful ... hopeful ...

    I so enjoy the masterful management of poetic devices ... The simple clarity of reason and beauty of rhyme ... Wonderful!

    Love
    Myra


  • Keith
    May 26

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    Excellent. And very topical, environmentwise. I particularly like the rhythm and rhyme scheme.

    Here's a link to the original, by Edward Jenner, who worked out a cure for smallpox.

    http://www.geocities.com/~bblair/ejrain.htm