Calling his name,
with the blade upon his
wrist,
he cannot escape the pain,
and the feelings of worthlessness
he slides the blade
deep into his skin,
and a single tear escapes
before his breath stops.
What do you think?
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really nice
i really like your poetry r u thinking of getting any published
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very short. yet very powerful...
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I like this. It says so much in so little space.
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interesting end. kind of ironic the last line is the last breath. i like it. great write
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Intense..very intense. I liked this alot. It clearly displayed a number of different emotions which made the poem even better to read. I like the way you left the poem on a 'cliff hanger' to make the reader imagine what might happen next. Very good, hope your okay keep it up!
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wow...this could be interpreted in many different ways...kinda leaves you wondering what's happening...tell us more!! thanks for sharing!! I liked it very much...kp
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