Cover me in chocolate
warm, and wet, and sweet.
Melted streams of ecstasy
till I’m good enough to eat.
Cover me in chocolate
liquid gushing from a spire.
I can feel your yearning
Your uncontrolled desire.
Cover me in chocolate
my luscious body captured;
and I will tempt your senses.
I will hold you raptured.
Cover me in chocolate
this order is a must;
just dip me in the fountain
and I will feed your lust.
Cover me in chocolate,
it’s a blissful baste.
Does it matter that I’m fruit?
You’ll still enjoy the taste.
Patricia Gibson-Little
March 12, 2004
Author notes
I hope this made you smile... I've been thinking about getting a Chocolate fountain for my wedding reception and I couldn't sleep because this poem insisted it be written.
Written March 12th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- A Chocolate Feast by Kethry.
500 points, ended April 6, 2004, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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LOL I Love this poem you created.. The love, lust, passion and yet so funny all comes from the depths of this poem.. great writting...
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excellent
i want to be covered in chocolates and ...lol.. oh well... just my fantasy ... i really enjoyed reading your poem.. gives me wild imagination!
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Hi,
Lol this was a fatansitc and humourous write. It also made me smile. Thank you for sharing this piece. Hope to read more from you soon.
Best of wishes to you and yours
Blue moon
P.S Cya I'm of to get loads of chocolate
Lol
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Very cute. It certainly made me smile!
PS: All that food talk made me hungry!
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Strawberries and chocolate delicious. Well I know I would put on a few pounds,LOL, I really like this piece, its light but sultry,its sexy but innocent,well done, KeeperOfTheCats.
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visions of sweets enter my mind...
yet how can one not but smile with this write!
May you find the sweetness within your life!
I did enjoy this!
Keep penning on one stroke at a time!
Bill -
Aww, bless, I hope you get your chocolate fountain, sounds pretty cool, great write........take care and good luck in the contest.
sanity.
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I'm sorry you couldn't sleep but not sorry you stayed up to write this, even if it was not for me. Good luck in the contest.
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its okay. not creative enough though.
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did make me smile :)
Yummyyyyyyyyyy I love this very much it flows yummy sounds yummy feels yummmy Its GREAT chocolate is loved by everyone and you make it sounds just grand...
Cover me in chocolate
my luscious body captured;
and I will tempt your senses.
I will hold you raptured.
Cover me in chocolate
this order is a must;
just dip me in the fountain
and I will feed your lust.
Chocolate bath sounds delicious now also
EXCELLENT PIECE HERE
great luck in contest and it did make me smile
all the best for your wedding
pauline
Pauline
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awww and hehe... very cute and adorable. Congratulations on your upcoming marriage and good luck with the contest. I really liked this piece... sensual and cuteall at the same time. Made me smile real big. I do love chocolate so there's another bonus.
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*this was very funny i didnt understand any of it at the beggining until at the end when it said im a piece of fruit otherwise id just be thinking huh? what on earth is this about lol i just wanna say thanks for sharing this and well also thanks for writing
rowena jo -
This is so fantastic. Chocolate!!!! I wrote one similar. I was describing eating a tomato. My husband and others say it sounds like sex, like yours does here. It's called "Truly So Bold".
Keep up the good writing. The flow was perfect. Thank you for sharing.
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A sensual, sweet, well-written poem. But I have to admit, I like fruity flavors over chocolate. But that matters not. Good write!
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YUMMMMM!!!! Sooo.. when is this reception??
I loved this poem! The title, first grabbed at me and pulled me in...
then I started to read... and ah! Too cute!!! I couldn't help a lil giggle ... when picturing all the gawking eyes...staring at the chocolate fountain
I know I'd be one of them... dipping anything I could find 
Love how the ending, you explained that this was written from a fruit's point. Too cute!!! My favorite stanza,
"Cover me in chocolate
this order is a must;
just dip me in the fountain
and I will feed your lust."
Since I've been ordered to do so... I must go dip
something in the chocolate!!! Very tasty write, I thank you
for posting it!!! Any luck on the fountain? Just curious
Keep penning on!
~Aimee
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ooooooooooh!! sounds positivly yummy!!! this is so original! I absolutly love it and I know the feeling when a poem insists on being written..good luck at ur wedding!!
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Fabulously decadent! My two boys were just at afriends house where there was a chocolate fountain. They sat by that dark waterfall and feasting on dark chocolate covered fruit and sweet dreams. Your words took me back to the luscious picture that was painted across that delicious canvas. Very insatiably written!
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Chocolate theory! ^.^ It works...Nice job!
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Who could possibly resist a poem with this title
Hell !!! Forget the fruit you sound good enough to eat
Good luck with the wedding plans
Kat -
what a sack, this guy who is sitting by me pressed sublit comment whylst i was typing it. and momentairly i was deprived of points i might have recieved my commenting on your poem. and that makes no sense. good job.
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I'd like to. good good poem of good
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Goodness, for about all of the poem I was thinking this should definitely be in the adult category, until the very last verse when its revealled that the poem's voice is most likely a strawberry!
Very cute, and congrats on your wedding! I hope you get all the chocolate you could possibly want (after all, everyone deserves chocolate!)
Good write, and keep penning!
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Ooh! That was so neat and unique! Definitely left me with a nice little giggle. Good write.
Blessings,
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well i'll be a monkey's crazy aunt flow!! SOMEBODY GET THIS WOMAN A FOUNTAIN OF CHOCOLATE!!!! SHE WANTS IT HER WAY! lol. i really liked this poem. it's really cute and it made me smile.
Alyssa
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well, its different. good poem, and it displays your thoughts well hehehe.
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chocolate rules all... hah this poem was great ^_^
but for some reason i have this sudden urge to buy some of that nestle quick chocolate syrup stuff and fill my bathtub with it... ahhh or just buy a chocolate bar.. whichever comes first..
anyways, it made meh smile!! good jooob
nachos cheese and anarchy,
~*kAyLa*~ -
yay
that is my dream... to bathe in chocolate... what a wonderful life that would be, huh? great job, this made me smile ear to ear! right on, write on!
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cute!!
lol...this was so sute! im so glad that you shared this poem! lol...i can try to come up with happy poems, lol, but most of them only end in sadness
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This was really good! It certainly made me smile especially as I got near the end where you said "Does it matter that I'm fruit?". Great job and thank you for sharing!
Little-Lovah
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