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the moon sometimes
between trees 
 
 
 
 
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  • xxiheartpoetryxx
    August 13

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    oh!

    I really love the way you write haiku...I hope I can be just like you..hehe..please read my haiku sometimes and tell me what you think about them..please...

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  • Mirrors shard
    June 3
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    beautiful


  • islekine silver member
    June 1

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    Nice...

    I like minimal...
    Write on!

    and


  • Concrete Angel silver member
    May 28

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    Lovely

    I love watching the moon at night... erm... well duh when else would ya watch it moron? lol hehe
    Anyway, great piece as always a fantastic visual with just three lines


  • Mari Goes gold member
    May 27

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    You my dear friend, are the only one I know that can use the word 'sometimes' in a haiku and make it work!
    I'm impressed with your moon, beautiful sight

    • haikumonk gold member
      May 27
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      Hello... LOLL I took a big chance on that word but it brings out the image the closest to what I felt. "the moon sometimes"... It seems like the longest moment in history but the actual awakening to the situation was the real moment. Thanks a bunch for your kind comment and for coming by to visit. I appreciate it.

      Monk


  • Kitesen
    May 27

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    I like this Don, a very known picture. But quit a modern touch in your style. Still simple and clear as it should be.


    • haikumonk gold member
      May 27
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      Thanks so much! I appreciate your great comment. Take care.


  • paulcreates silver member
    May 26

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    !

    Oh! Love this one.
    It's even coming out of the chimney.
    Sometimes it's behind this or that sometimes it's out in the open. I can see this vividly Don.
    I even think it works not to have the dash because it assists the words in their meander.
    Great ku!

    • haikumonk gold member
      May 26
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      Hi Paul... thanks a bunch! I always wrestle with the em-dash etc. But, whenever I can (these days) I try to let the syntax alone create the feel of a line break. Thanks for the great comment.


  • Haiku Kin
    May 26

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    You seem to favour the moon like I favour graveyards. Very nice capture. Kudos!

    • haikumonk gold member
      May 26

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      Thanks so much! I love the moon... and the moon kigo is autumn, btw. Unless the moon is specified "hunter's moon" etc. it is always referencing autumn. During autumn, leaves drop from some trees and not others... so the moonlight will come through at varying and different points. Fun stuff!


  • Peteskid gold member
    May 26
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    very nice, reminds of Basho, another fine capture of the moon...PK

    • haikumonk gold member
      May 26
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      Thanks PK... that's quite a compliment. If I can just remind someone of Basho I'm more than double happy!!! Take care,

      Monk

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