You know your dreams
Like the back of you hand
Talk of going to the extremes
But im watching as you simply stand
Your glued down to the floor
But your not that far behind
All you need is a tiny bit more
Yet your acting as if you were confined
Stop waiting for happiness to find you
It has never come that way
It is something you must pursue
And that is something I must convey
If you see your dreams way up in the sky
Don’t mourn
Spread your wings and get ready to fly
One day you will be airborne
Author notes
Im just glad I made it on time! =]
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Great Job, I really enjoy reading yor poems because I believe we write very similar to each other and with the same thoughts. Keep up the great work.
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Thank you. =] Im glad to know that there is someone out there
that shares the same views as me, or at least somewhat. =]
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masterpiece
I have no words for this. You're completely right. I'am depressed for a long time. wish I could feel the way you describe in this truly great poem. I have dreams, but never had the strength.
Keep writing such masterpieces
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This tickled me inside. I'm a dreamer of course...lol...enough said, right? Well I like the style, I enjoy the word usage, and love the soul to this poem. I like it!
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Aww, this is so awesome, I completely found myself in this poem.
Way to write!
Nela
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eeh
it was nice piece.
kind of thinking missy pissy
Don't mourn really
Wow.. great write
im feeling something after reading it
by
the poet of hearts and beautiful words
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nicely written
If you see your dreams way up in the sky
Don’t mourn
Spread your wings and get ready to fly
One day you will be airborne
great ending to an enjoyable read,,, thanks for sharing
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I love the message here, and I love what you're going for, but I really think the lines should be worked around a bit so that the rhythm flows throughout the poem.
For example, if "simply" was omitted from the fourth line, the first stanza would flow perfectly. I think a little re-construction would make this a great poem, as it has everything going for it but the rhythm. I really like the theme, it speaks to the reader well. -
Very well done. You cant read something like this without stopping and reviewing your own life. I would suggest dropping a syllable from the last line of the first stanza for a better rythem.
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Thank you! I will see how I can change that line! Your input is much appreciated! =]
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"Your glued down to the floor
But your not that far behind
All you need is a tiny bit more
Yet your acting as if you were confined"
I really really like this stanza.
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