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The Nightmare I'll Never Forget

Blissfull slumber overtook my still body, caressing it like silk.
Comfort and happiness filled my mind, erasing stress.
Suddenly colors of death and passion filled my head.
A heart-wrenching screech disrupted the silence.

Paralyzed I stood, watching the ruby waves seeping from fresh wounds.
Convulsions spiked up my back, quickening my racing heart.
Like a tortured animal I howled, collapsing to my knees beside the victim.
That dark knight smiled evilly, black dagger in hand, stained with crimson red.

Agony breached my mind and soul; dots of rain fell to the pavement below.
With a final laugh, that dark knight stepped forward, dagger now raised.
Into my heart his metal dagger plunged, spilling out the essence of my life.
My screams were silenced as he pierced me again, blood rapidly flowing beneath my shaking hands.

"Why?" an agonized whisper escaped my quivering lips, icy tendrils filling me.
"For all that you have done," that dark knight murmured with a sincere sneer.
Life slowly drained from my body, as did the unknown victim's; his body broken and dead.
Regrets pulsed through my veins, my heart. Darkness quickly followed.

I glanced upward at this knight as my still corpse began to fall to the gravel ground.
My body went cold; the somber moon reflected light onto my demon's eyes.
One last breath, one last gargle as the last of my blood flowed; I looked to my side.
Before me the decapacitated corpse lay; the one who originally captured my heart in his hands.

That's when I woke up...a strangled gasp from my throat.
Standing in front of me was that dark knight....the sky turned to black.
My nightmare would never end, instead replay over and over.
"Time to come out and play again."


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'There is hope in darkness and there is darkness in hope'

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  • XMysticalNightmareX
    November 20
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    WOW

    realllly amazing write!!! i just couldnt keep my eyes off of it, you are such a great writer!!! I dont think i could ever write this good lol. wish you the best of luck in this contst and keep writing!!!!!!

  • Joshuavk
    October 31

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    Out of the last 100 poems I've read, yours is definately the best. Great job writing this.


  • bunnyslasher157
    October 31

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    I enjoyed your poem greatly. It's pratically perfect. Good luck and keep writing!!


  • Hikari Lady
    October 15

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    Soooo creepy and scary, the way you ended it with the nightmare playing over and over again was a wonderful touch, it added so much strength to the whole peice. I really enjoyed reading this poem, thanks for entering and good luck.

    Love
    ~Noor


  • LeilaJayne
    October 11

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    Ohhh that sure sent a chill down my spine! Very eerie write, i have had some nightmares that i will never forget too. It's weird how they mess with your headd!!
    Thanks so much for entering and best of luck in the contest x


  • usually-untitled
    September 27

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    okay. while this contest was for your best prewrite /that no one notices/, this is an excellent and poetic description and i enjoyed reading it.

  • catstar
    September 26

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    This is a very very scary nightmare. I was scared stiff just reading it. . You describe the events and images well. I felt like I was there.

    Thank you for entering my contest. Good luck.

  • poets whisper silver member
    September 12

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    I had a terrible nightmare last night and then was afraid to got back to sleep. I was afraid it would re-play or that worse dreams would start. I was up until after four ... nice job with the write. Lots of great imagery and it was captivating. Thank you for entering the contest


  • Sheilasbabygal4life
    September 12

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    Very well written. You have made it to my finalists so you must particiapte in Round 2. Round 2 will start shortly after this one. Thanks for entering and best of luck in round 2!


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    September 11

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    Dreams can make for some of the best poetry, you did a nice job converting your dream into poetic form.

    ♥
    whisper


  • Concrete Angel silver member
    September 8

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    Just commenting on my finalists :)

    *shivers* This reminds me of nightmares I've had... I hate the feelings of dreas accomanied by nightmares, I'm stressed out enough in eral life, I do NOT want to be stressed in my sleep! LOL
    My nightmares usually consist of a bad guy that I just can't seem to make out... usually just a dark creepy shadow...
    I enjoyed how you twisted this at the end, giving it a recurring feel like there is no escape. Great write. Thanks for entering, and now that you're a finalist good luck


  • Agrona
    September 1

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    (bows gently)

    What a thing to endure a nightmare can be. Painful and fearfilled and agonizing. And we only awake to fall back asleep and dream again in demon keep. This is our Fate. This poem was beautiful and fearfilled as I stated. It must have been quite an experience to be had.

    Thank you for entering,
    Your Czarina,
    ~Seraph


  • Karra-Mayy
    September 1
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    i really enjoyed this

    good luck x


  • MJ Forgives
    August 29

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    Wow your poem was really cool to read. I really liked it. I hope you do well in my contest and thanks for your entry.
    -Jess


  • mitchybaby
    August 25

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    Great imagery, I suffer from nightmares so I can definitly relate to this piece. Thank you for entering and good luck


  • kylierenea
    August 17

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    Ooh! I dark poem There are occasions when I like dark poems, and this is one. I think you wrote it well and made it interesting to read. I wasn't bored with it at all (and that's hard for me!). I also like the mystery within the poem. Great poem, keep up the good work and thanks for entering my contest I can't wait to read more from you.


  • kerrypn
    August 8

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    Very dark, slightly chilling-you have worked the imagery around this mysterious dark knight very well. I love the double twist at the end-something nearly everyone can relate to. Very much enjoyed. Thank you for entering and good luck

    • XxLoverOfDarknessxX
      August 8
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      thanks! I'm glad you liked this one. Sadly it was based off of a true nightmare that I had and have every once in a while.


  • Midnite-Rae
    August 1

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    I loved the imagery in this. You did a great job. I liked the way it flowed. "Blissfull slumber overtook my still body.
    Comfort and happiness filled my mind, erasing stress.
    Suddenly colors of death and passion filled my head.
    A heart-wrenching sound pierced the still silence." I absolutely love that beginning part. It's my favorite part and the perfect start to the poem. You did a wonderful job. Thanks for entering and Good luck in my contest.

  • saz 09
    July 31
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    thanks for entering very well written good luck


  • Griswold
    July 29

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    Hello and thank you for taking the time to enter the "Fight for the Gold" contest. A very dark and nightmarish write. I really wonder sometimes what our subconscious is trying to tell us in our dreams. Maybe I don't want to know. Best of luck to you... Scott


  • LonelyAngel
    July 14

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    well done.

    You have a raw talent for writing dark poems and proving true emotion within the words expressed. I think every person should become known to this poet! I would not change anything about it and it is goin to go further on AP.

    Amazing write.
    Best of luck in the contest!
    Thank you

    xYx


  • dutch2lips gold member
    July 9

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    still silence? paralized I stood, those things just stopped me reading on, I finally did and really enjoyed the rest of the write, thank you for entering


  • Miss Macabre
    July 7

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    Amazing imagery and very chilling. I myself love nightmares and nightmarish poems. Thanks for entering and best of luck.


  • Cyanide Dreams
    July 7

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    Second Stanza, that had amazing imagery in it. I liked it.

    In the fourth stanza, I don't really like how the speaking parts go, but maybe that's just me.

    This had some terrifying parts to it, but the end seems kind of cliche. Waking up. I think if you would have left the character in your poem to die, it would have made it even more dark. I liked this though. Your imagery was great and I like the emotion you put into this. Good job and good luck in the contest.

    Josh


  • awitersheart
    July 7

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    Scary

    This is awesome I love it cold dark and chilling, just what I like good write
    Good luck in the contest.


  • PinkeyPromise
    July 7
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    this is really good. a great dark write!


  • Ami
    July 6

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    wow this was really dark nightmareish .. My favorite!
    ^_^ Dark writes are awesome I loved the imaginary in this great write

    Thank you so much for entering my contest
    And good luck!

    -♥Amy♥


  • glenn shannon silver member
    July 3
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    holy shit that was scary glad it was just a nighmare thanks for entry good luck and sweet dreams


  • Antebellum
    July 1

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    wonderful flow.

    "Paralyzed I stood, watching crimson waves flow.
    Convulsions spiked up my back, quickening my heart."

    I really like this part.
    wonderful description.


  • Enrinye
    June 24

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    An amazing poem, loved the tension in it, it thrilled me until the very end!

    loved the flowing and the powerful emotions, you wrote with such passion, I could relate to it- all of us had awful nightmares that made us feel like this...

    ''Like a tortured animal I howled, collapsing to my knees beside the victim.
    That dark knight smiled evilly, black dagger in hand, stained ruby red.''

    this lines just got me...tremendous...

    take care
    Suza

  • Karra-Mayy
    June 19

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    Increadiblee

    Amazing In Fact :L

    lol

    There Was So Much Passion

    I Was Seriously At The End Of My Chair thinking What Would Happen

    Loved it

    And You Were Right I Did Love That Onee

    • XxLoverOfDarknessxX
      June 19
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      thanks. i'm glad that you liked this piece. it was based off of a terrible nightmare I had one night.


  • Gods only child
    June 18
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    i love the poem- it was written so detailed and passionatrly


  • Death Reaper ver. 6
    June 18

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    incredibly dark and passionate.... good choice of words.... you're indeed very talented... good luck to you... :-)


  • sexy emo fairy
    June 12
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    nice dark poem. well done and thank you for entering


  • PhoenixFaith
    June 11

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    When I started reading this I was actually really scared! I didn't think that it was going to end well...but you changed what I thought just like that! Great job

    Best of luck and thanks for entering
    Kate


  • Hannah Carr
    June 9
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    Weird...I like it. It's like a horror story


  • Intoxicated Dreams
    June 6

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    Oh, that's harsh, when it's like a dream with in a dream, freaky! that is some scary stuff megan.... But this is amazing writing you have here! WOW, made me straighten up! Beautifully written hun !


  • Angela-1234
    June 3
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    Greatttt! it was just wonderful i could really feel the emotion i loved it!

    • XxLoverOfDarknessxX
      June 3
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      thanks. sadly this was something that I actually had a dream about one night. i still have these every once in a while too. i end up waking up screaming, gasping for air, or crying. sometimes all three at once.

  • Unholy Sinner
    May 27
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    Fantastic imagery, and I like the small twist in the end. Great job.


  • Zombiefreak13
    May 26
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    fantastic imagery


  • MissCDT
    May 25
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    I have chills running up and down my spine. Your imagery is spactacularly vivid.

    • XxLoverOfDarknessxX
      June 1
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      Thank you for your comment! I'm glad someone likes my work. This one thank heavens didn't happen in real life, but I've had this dream way too many times....it's bad enough I can see it roll through my head every once in a while....

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