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7 Deadly Sins of a Woman (Some Restrictions Apply)

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Estrogen- unstable like the winds,

like a snake sheds its skins,

all for shits and grins,

like the 7 Deadly Sins.

 

Lust

You say you want respect in your...skinny little mini.

I'm bettin slut for days, like a horn-o-plenty.

 

Gluttony

Give me more and more, your attention gets me high.

I deserve all the days, all the days that end in Y.

 

Greed

So Baby, here's a penny for your thoughts

to buy some shoulda, coulda oughts...

but their's no store near the couch,

honesty stingin like ouch!

 

[which brings your lazy ass to]

 

Sloth

The only gift you utilize

is what lies between your thighs.

Mama taught you all the lies.

Daddy hangs his head and cries.

 

now...

 

Wrath (Anger)

Don't forget to regret.

Don't spin this Russian roulette.

Cause my mind is a ghat.

My mouth go brat tat tat tat

as I spit hot truth to your dome.

 

Envy

...the monster you can be.

You've got green eyes- like money ink dries.

It takes more than Benjamins to walk with the wise.

 

so swallow your

 

Pride (Vanity)

You wear your Harlequin mask with your eyes wide shut...

but if you can't spark my mind- you're tossed like a... cigarette butt.

 

 

 

 

Author notes

This is not for all women...only those whom would talk shit to the distinguished gentlemen that have entered this contest. lol

photo credit to clusterbombtomorrow @ photobucket

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  • Marjorie Marie
    October 19

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    Ahhhhh I know this woman! She's decked out in Ed Hardy and she hates me and that makes me joyful! Once again, you are amazing. I love this and will reread it a few more times.


  • Mango Memories gold member
    October 15

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    im not going to say anything just give you three clappys and run right away...

  • J Macabre
    August 30

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    This was awesome! Brilliant! Amazing! Yes! I love it...for once men aren't the only ones being told where they are going wrong. I love this...this was just....wow.


  • lunarlunacy
    August 7

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    was gonna add to my list but evidently the schmucks of power have disabled that as well in hopes we will pay to be censored

  • Juno101
    July 28

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    wow, this is amazingly creative and every sin stanza has amazing lines. i love this poem. everything goes together and i never get distracted by a mistake in spelling or flow because there isnt any mistakes. its perfect.


  • lyricist
    June 3

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    bigperm speaking volumes!

    excellent excellent. so much truth in this poem. especially about sloth and pride. here in cincinnati. them lines by itself speaks for a LOT of women here. keep speaking the truth brother

  • Really well crafted. It is easy flowing, and a masterpiece. But I really don't agree with your perception of woman, I think you got the majority of woman all wrong. The only kind a girl that you find like that, is the kind of girl that got it easy all her life, cause shes got good looks. But if guy's were less superficial, they'd find a brilliant woman, who doesn't need a man to satisfy her .
    Rose.

  • Nice Write

    I like the break down and the progression, how it forms a story. A nice slam piece, well written, good flow and rhyme. Just remember I still have one entry left.


  • Desire gold member
    June 2

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    Wow~

    It is strange but the contest info is not on Your poem page that is bizarre but
    Holy Shindig~ You took the seven sins on a worldwide spin
    Oy!! Love Your notes in the AC~
    has someone been talking outside the shiz nit
    The first line had me rolling ~
    I maybe Woman but heck...
    I keep my Estrogen in check...
    [I think I do...checks meter]
    Very Creative...I give You a

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent
    Best wishes in the contest
    with love & light~ Desire~*~


    • bigperm
      June 2
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      yeah I entered another piece before the allowance of multiple...

      I messaged the host as to wheather I could re-enter it, but I haven't heard back from her. Anyway thanks for checking it out.


      • Desire gold member
        June 2
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        You are more than Welcome...I see it in the contest
        which is good...but just don't see it here...
        Keep that quill dancing~

        [runs off with bigperm's ink]

  • I like this. Its real. Nice.


  • JinSays gold member
    May 29

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    I have green eyes, and this wasnt very nice at all.
    sniff.
    sniff.
    okay. well, I guess so then.


  • Raspy
    May 29

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    Only 7

    For the record
    Monsieur creme fraiche,
    I'm one coolest,calmest,graceful,elegant well bred primadonna in public,but in the closet baby...
    Haha thats a different ball game.
    Gud luck!


  • moluv10
    May 27
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    This is hot one! way to represent for the men in this contest!! I love it!


  • Rheea gold member
    May 27
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    Oh hello no I have green eyes darlin back it up back it way uppppppppppp. your just mean you are =)


    • bigperm
      May 27
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      I'll try not to hold it against you...lol

      "Iago:
      O, beware, my lord, of jealousy;
      It is the green-eyed monster which doth mock
      The meat it feeds on; that cuckold lives in bliss
      Who, certain of his fate, loves not his wronger;
      But, O, what damned minutes tells he o'er
      Who dotes, yet doubts, suspects, yet strongly loves! "
      Shakespeare from Othello

      envy is that green eyed monster that consume all haters. Do I sense some jealousy? lol

      • Rheea gold member
        May 28
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        no umm well maybe you sure do write well =)

        • bigperm
          May 28
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          many thanks...

          your really kind and I appreciate the read.

  • This was like a slap in the face!
    This was an awesome slam!
    Glad i am not in this contest. Phew!
    Good luck In this contest for i haven't read to many
    entries but i am heading over there to read more. After this i have got to read more of the ladies.
    This was just too much.
    -Mandi

  • distinguished gentlemen????
    sly players in disguise...
    steaming for our pleasures
    but did he measure up....
    as last man standing....

    we'll see....
    and
    oh my .....unless I forget to tell you
    your ink does rock too bad about
    you're wilting c...k.

    hey girls-what do you think
    is he the last man standing?
    or simply a dead man drooling!

    ears/Seattle
    fantastic writing!
    flawless
    artistic
    and fearless.



  • True dat... true dat...
    You tell them baby mama, big ppppppERRRRMMMM!!!!
    What's up now, "Ladies"?


  • Solo Wisp gold member
    May 25

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    Love the incorporation of the deadly sins .. this is an awesome take and smack. Very creative ... veeery.

    Great showing!

    ~S

  • Powerful stuff, the eternal battle of the sexes, only when we rise above lust and desire will we truly be able to see the Stars. But the path is fraught with danger and self delusion
    A very pertinent poem well done
    David


  • Yemassee gold member
    May 25

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    Well if I were a woman I probably would have a lot of questions to ask you, but since I'm not I'll just sit outside the fence and wait and see if any take exception to this piece. I have my Moxie and popcorn right here ready.

    Contention makes for fun reading.

    I've been lucky. Being a cave-dweller the ladies I've known are usually fellow troglodytes and apparently are not as prone to such deadly extremes.

    Having said that, I've never known a human that doesn't fit at least a little in all seven of those categories...sadly I don't break that streak either.

    There should be some fun entries in this contest!

  • sensational and bloody ruthless i think theyre cumming for your bro in packs lol

  • DAMN THIS IS TRUE SLAM!!!!!

    Baby, you did this like a master! This just rolled off the tongue. I could see the body language as it was being spit. You know like hard and rough. I loved it, I mean each and every word. Good luck in the contest. Though I truly doubt you need it.

  • This was great! The way you wrote this made me want to read it faster and faster to read all seven and I must say you nailed it! Excellently done!

  • What A Pen

    You really put it right out there I like the conviction each line holds and the flow of each stanza into the next this is definitely a really score and what a take on the prompt I am in awe very, very nice write my heartfelt thank you for this most enjoyable read and good luck somehow I don’t think you will need it your pen is perfection darling.


    Lady E


  • Daizee silver member
    May 25
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  • Swangrnv gold member
    May 25

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    OUCHH!!

    This is blazing hott! wow, score one for the girls! gotta give it up on the real..well done poetess..

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